secretlyvulnerable
on I love you by jerzeygirl22
16 Oct 2007, 12:06 AM
I know exactly how you feel
IDONT GET THIS POEM IS WONDERFUL. Y DONT PEOPLE LIKE IT..
THAT IS SO SAD. I KNDA KNOW WHAT U ARE TALKING ABOUT . IT HAPPENS TO ALOT OF PEOPLE I GUESS.
zoiks.
The poems gives a good vision of the mother and her children.
The word "separate" is the strongest word in this poem, thank you. Cheers and beers, and welcome to Area 6, secret hideout.
T. Jonathron Remp
on While waiting for someone to check in my cars by INTRANSIT
17 Oct 2007, 12:47 AM
A slice of time. A 17 calorie slice of time, a thin, carbohydrate-free slice of time. A trans-fat free, utterly nutritionally void slice of time. ~10~
smells like a cigarette, reads like a dream ~9~
Sweet. The seperation of adult responsibility and childhood innocence all linked by flesh until the teddy is subtle yet leaves me wanting those good ole 'stand by me' river phoenix days back.
too many words
either a 8 or a 1 ....dunno .... say 5 .... involving, though ... make that 6
.... er ... perp or victim ? ( or do you consider yourself both ?) ... nul points ... for the poem alone, that is
juvenile ... still, can't knock you for your years
scary as fuck and somewhat sexy ... or am i reading too much there? .... more tea .... genius
cop-out saying it's for someone else .... good story tho
don't he though
shows promise
too many words
re-write once the devil has gone and note the difference