regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 64.160.147.161	24-Jul-04/7:36 PM
I'm not fond of "forms" but it hangs -7- well enough.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165	25-Jul-04/6:35 AM
I have no problem with forms and I like this very much. Thanks for the intro.
Re: Respect on a Quiet Hillside by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 64.160.147.161	24-Jul-04/7:22 PM
Love it. How does "They paid their respects" instead of "did it" sound to you? Grandpaw was such a 'perv' (in a good way).
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 204.31.168.232	25-Jul-04/7:49 AM
Kyrielle sonnet.. hrmm. Nice variant on the Kyrielle. Smashin. Blessed with eight.
Re: Broken Sonnet by Sasha	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.70	24-Jul-04/7:11 PM
This is: A: A practice in innovation? B: A practice at sonnets. (Doubtfully needed) C: A practice in detais. My unsuredness begets you a rank score.
Re: Bad animal limericks by INTRANSIT	Dan garcia-Black 64.160.147.161	24-Jul-04/7:48 PM
The turtle wins!-9-
Re: Luicidity by LucidRevelation	some deleted user 65.100.220.228	24-Jul-04/7:50 PM
are you a cigarette? ah, well, you almost tricked me.
Re: Fear by Mona Lisa	Dan garcia-Black 64.160.147.161	24-Jul-04/7:50 PM
Don't jump! Here's a -7-. Write on, right on.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 65.100.220.228	24-Jul-04/7:51 PM
sad and sung, but unique just the same. (no pun intended)
Re: Restless rest. by Furin	some deleted user 65.100.220.228	24-Jul-04/7:55 PM
the punctuation of this needs a LOT of work, since the sentences, though poetic, are barely represented. try a comma or two, and check your ending punctuation, there are some places where you need question marks, but lack them. the poem isn't strong enough to drown out the grammatical errors, so my voting would be pointless. this needs honing. badly.
Re: A Mothers Heart by TAMARAG67	TAMARAG67 64.12.116.140	24-Jul-04/9:51 PM
thanks dan- its nice to know someone gets it
Re: Razor Blade Romance by TwilightDawned	TwilightDawned 24.69.255.205	24-Jul-04/11:22 PM
C'mon people..vote and leave comments..
Re: peanut butter sandwiches on a hot summer day by w~* ATHENA *~w	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165	25-Jul-04/6:22 AM
If this means what I think it does, sad, very sad. Good poem though
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.8.240	25-Jul-04/7:07 AM
I like the slow sad understated tone, and there are some really good turns of phrase contained. At the park where we Use to listen to Concert bands 'til dark, now Nothing sounds in tune this, in particular, feels just right, except, I think used instead of use. or perhaps just: at the park where we once listened.... it is difficult to pull of the old, "you're gone, I'm sad and alone" theme in a poem, but I think you have done it pretty well.
Re: peanut butter sandwiches on a hot summer day by w~* ATHENA *~w	edpeterson 68.79.8.240	25-Jul-04/7:30 AM
did you spread it on toast? or did he shoot it in too deep?
Re: The American Soldier by x0lovelylarnx0	Sasha 69.138.238.225	24-Jul-04/4:29 PM
Rhymes are off, iambic pentameter is not there, and the sire.fire rhyme is forced, as are they all. This is actually a pretty good specimen of the crap that happens when young'uns like you think they can be profound. -blessed with a 2- Really, I'm being hard on you because I am expressing an honest opinion, not because I'm retaliating.
Re: The Dream by x0lovelylarnx0	Sasha 69.138.238.225	24-Jul-04/4:31 PM
This shows some grasp of imagery. The rhymes are once again forced though. When you have a word accented on the penultimate syllable ending a line, you should have 11 syllables in the line total.
Re: Respect on a Quiet Hillside by Dovina	?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.73.121	24-Jul-04/5:13 PM
I would have preferred it if the girl's grandfather rose up out of the grave and raped her, filling her with his zombied seed. That would also leave room for a sequel. Quite good anyway.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.8.240	24-Jul-04/5:39 PM
A kyrielle sonnet is 14 lines of iambic quatrameter broken into 3 quatrains and a final couplet, the end of each containing a repeating phrase. This is a typical rhyme scheme: aabB ccbB ddbB aB
Re: Sorry by shit	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.70	24-Jul-04/7:08 PM
This dog is rooting. I smell a deeply buried truffle. Do not become a fungus.