Re: The Power Of Standing Still (Ghazellanelle) by Bachus	tolstoyleo 172.197.181.253	1-Jul-04/1:59 AM
How do you swim standing still? -8-
regarding some deleted poem...	nentwined 66.92.183.34	30-Jun-04/10:45 PM
I never knew Jheri Curl was spelled like that. crazy. I like the first two lines, lines 4 and 5, don't see the tie-in so much though I suppose it doesn't have to have one. But then the rest of it doesn't tie together for me (though I'm obnoxiously tired, on my way to bed); I really like the last two lines as well, but everything's all a discordant jumble. :/
regarding some deleted poem...	Chasz Misleading 68.225.250.222	30-Jun-04/10:59 PM
Lol, god's wife has a sense of humor she/he actually gave you a two after I get all zeroes and after he/she gives many people zeroes, I guess I get to give the zero this time
Re: Stuck in VI by jonnyduk	tolstoyleo 172.197.181.253	1-Jul-04/1:54 AM
I gave it a 6. I thought there should be one more "Why?"
regarding some deleted poem...	tolstoyleo 172.197.181.253	1-Jul-04/1:55 AM
Creative, but is natural beauty fit to drink? -6-
Re: Blobby song$ by MR Blobby	tolstoyleo 172.197.181.253	1-Jul-04/1:57 AM
I just don't get it. Would you please explain it to me?
Re: The Power Of Standing Still (Ghazellanelle) by Bachus	tolstoyleo 172.197.181.253	1-Jul-04/2:02 AM
In its form, the ghazal is a short poem rarely of more than a dozen couplets in the same metre. It always opens with a rhyming couplet called matla. The rhyme of the opening couplet is repeated at the end of second line in each succeeding verse, so that the rhyming pattern may be represented as AA, BA, CA, DA, and so on. In addition to the restriction of rhyme, the ghazal also observes the convention of radif. Radif demands that a portion of the first line -- comprising not more than two or three words -- immediately preceding the rhyme-word at the end, should rhyme with its counterpart in the second line of the opening couplet, and afterwards alternately throughout the poem. The opening couplet of the ghazal is always a representative couplet: it sets the mood and tone of the poem and prepares us for its proper appreciation. The last couplet of the ghazal called makta often includes the pen-name of the poet, and is more personal than general in its tone and intent. Here the poet may express his own state of mind, or describe his religious faith, or pray for his beloved, or indulge in poetic self-praise. The different couplets of the ghazal are not bound by the unity and consistency of thought. Each couplet is a self-sufficient unit, detachable and quotable, generally containing the complete expression of an idea.
Re: Poetry. by jonnyduk	tolstoyleo 172.197.181.253	1-Jul-04/2:05 AM
"His hobbies a waste of time." multiple hobbies? -0-
regarding some deleted poem...	tolstoyleo 172.197.181.253	1-Jul-04/2:09 AM
hmmmmmmmm That is a naw-dog situation for me. I read it and said to myself, "Naw Dog." -1- for typing it
regarding some deleted poem...	Bachus 24.130.62.63	30-Jun-04/3:02 PM
Fascism rocks cocks!!!
Re: The One and Only by J.B. Manning	jonnyduk 217.137.173.89	30-Jun-04/4:21 PM
no comment
Re: Strung Out On Sunlight by J.B. Manning	jonnyduk 217.137.173.89	30-Jun-04/4:22 PM
Sounds like a good night out gone baaaaaad
Re: The Power Of Standing Still (Ghazellanelle) by Bachus	jonnyduk 217.137.173.89	30-Jun-04/4:23 PM
Don't get it, im too dim for this.
Re: The Blood by Blindpoetry	jonnyduk 217.137.173.89	30-Jun-04/4:24 PM
what the fuuuuuuuuuuuck???
Re: Xansis by jonnyduk	god'swife 209.178.134.78	30-Jun-04/4:36 PM
It has a nature theme as it should, unlike most haikus on ranker, but the rhyme kills it. Try inverting the line; like splinters...cliffs. Since a haiku is so small to begin with it seems strange to use up syllables with words like and & but.
Re: The Power Of Standing Still (Ghazellanelle) by Bachus	god'swife 209.178.134.78	30-Jun-04/4:38 PM
I especialy like the last couplet, nice build up.
Re: finally i say goodbye by francis nor capule	god'swife 209.178.134.78	30-Jun-04/4:41 PM
Stand in front of the mirror and read this out loud. Let me know what you think.
Re: South Shore by Rodavlas	god'swife 209.178.134.78	30-Jun-04/4:53 PM
Bizarre.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 65.161.41.48	30-Jun-04/5:05 PM
You ought to have looked up the appropriate spelling for jheri curl before you spelled it like the name of that actress who played Seven-of-Nine on Star Trek:Voyager, which I bet big money you have taped and filed somewhere at your house.
Re: Poetry. by jonnyduk	MacFrantic 198.81.26.16	30-Jun-04/8:59 PM
If you're going to take that title, at least make an attempt at something worthwile and/or somewhat pleasing to read. *5*