Re: Perversions 5: Kink vs. Mothra by razorgrin	Dreammaker1024 67.149.74.86	12-Mar-05/1:49 PM
Rather interesting
Re: Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet	Dreammaker1024 67.149.74.86	12-Mar-05/1:47 PM
I like it... believe the end could use somethin else, add a lil somethin, but I still think you did a good job.
Re: wishes by the_poetess	Dovina 12.72.13.229	12-Mar-05/11:32 AM
I don't think anybody gets you. I've read the comments and see you as much younger, but like me, healthy, smart and bored. Jumping off a bridge and can't even drown. So what can I tell you except to find somepalce to feel needed and keep plugging away at this; it has potential.
Re: a comment on Enchanted Place by Beyond_Dreams	Dovina 12.72.13.229	12-Mar-05/11:16 AM
You fooled me then.
Re: Girl of my Dreams??? by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Dovina 12.72.13.229	12-Mar-05/11:15 AM
An interesting romance to follow as it winds through the ranker.
Re: Never Did You by Dreammaker1024	Dovina 12.72.13.229	12-Mar-05/11:12 AM
Not really a poem, maybe a prose poem. To be a poem, it should be cleverly written, unususl, and touching to an uninformed reader.
Re: The Better Beggar by PodPoet	Dovina 12.72.13.229	12-Mar-05/11:07 AM
It's a good point, but I think you carry on too much. Three or four verses could say it better. And trying to maintain rhyme and beat have weakened most of the verses.
Re: Your New Apartment by jessicazee	Dovina 12.72.13.229	12-Mar-05/11:01 AM
Punctuation would help to clarify, especially using prose poem form. As it stands, I had to keep going back.
Re: a comment on Enchanted Place by Beyond_Dreams	Beyond_Dreams 71.98.1.126	12-Mar-05/11:00 AM
I would provide a link but I can't give you a link to my pictures I create in my mind. I can tell you what I was thinking about when I wrote this poem. A butterfly garden with a stream running through the center. Filled with the obviouse. Sitting on a bench just drawing nature around you untill night fall.
Re: Enchanted Place by Beyond_Dreams	Dovina 12.72.13.229	12-Mar-05/10:55 AM
You have some good wording here, but I don't know the subject. An art-based poem like this might come through nicely if I were looking at the artwork. I suggest in writing such a poem that you provide a link to the art.
Re: How to make a suicide bomber by Caducus	Dovina 12.72.13.229	12-Mar-05/10:49 AM
A commentary on American policy in Iraq, and a good one. Some repetative lines, probably written in angst - "spat on your brothers" and "Killed my brothers" - "told you how to live,who to worship" and "criticized my God."
Re: a comment on How to make a suicide bomber by Caducus	Dovina 12.72.13.229	12-Mar-05/10:43 AM
Most of us would say "comprehension" in our ineptness. It's his gift to us to correct oiur grammar.
Re: a comment on wishes by the_poetess	edpeterson 68.79.58.164	12-Mar-05/10:11 AM
You are incompetent. Stop chasing rainbows and start chasing that elusive C minus in your English class. I would suggest you start by swallowing your teacher's bulbous bratwurst; it is your only real chance.
Re: bleeding by crooked_smile	edpeterson 68.79.58.164	12-Mar-05/10:03 AM
frightful
Re: Memories by RION12	edpeterson 68.79.58.164	12-Mar-05/10:02 AM
piles
Re: a comment on Apostrophetic Loss by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.5.43	12-Mar-05/6:59 AM
Opinionated spillage. So what?
Re: How to make a suicide bomber by Caducus	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	12-Mar-05/5:54 AM
Is this poeme about Iraq, or if not exclusively about Iraq, do you think it applies to Iraq and to what is happening there?
Re: Apostrophetic Loss by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.11.13	12-Mar-05/4:27 AM
"But Woods' critics on the right belong to what might be called the conservative elite—neoconservatives and libertarians — whereas Hannity, Buchanan, and the radio talk-show hosts are, like their most fervid followers, essentially populist. Whatever jabs they may take at the liberal media or at academia, conservative elites, like their (elite) liberal adversaries (and here I'm generalizing), harbor an underlying respect for the values of higher education, science, reason, and expertise. Conservative populists, on the other hand, more often exhibit scorn for intellectual authority altogether. For a while now, conservative elites have made common cause, sometimes cynically, with populist anti-intellectuals. Once upon a time, the original neoconservatives — the academics and intellectuals around the journal the Public Interest — rested their critiques of liberalism on penetrating social science scholarship and attacked the left for preferring bleeding-heart sentiment to polemical rigor. But now the Public Interest is defunct, and in the Bush years, conservatism has embraced not only the familiar ridicule of the eggheads but a rejection of the very legitimacy of independent, nonpartisan expert authority. The wisdom of legal professionals, such as those in the American Bar Association, is now denied, and, since George Bush took office, no longer used by the White House in evaluating candidates for federal judgeships. Mainstream journalism, such as that in the major newspapers and network news shows, is deemed liberal, slanted, and unreliable. The faith-based belief in creationism, enjoying renewed support of late, is accorded equal (or greater) weight as the scientific theory of evolution." - www.slate.com/id/2114713/
Re: a comment on Snow Sucks by JoyLuck	zodiac 212.118.11.13	12-Mar-05/3:58 AM
Christ, that's what I'm supposed to get from looking close? Of course I know what's in this post, but I thought we were talking about whether or not it's a poem. Let me put it another way: If I printed the words, oh I don't know, 'Humbug' and 'Salubrious' (yesterday's dictionary.com word of the day!) in different fonts and jaunty angles on a white canvas, would it be a poem or a picture? If you don't clearly distinguish between the two, aren't you in for a world of shit? I say, Yes, you probably are.
Re: a comment on Snow Sucks by JoyLuck	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.37	12-Mar-05/1:22 AM
Look close. All is alone yet together. Where as the rest of the message is broken and scattered. Accidental or no, I see the ALL, being together but alone, as artistic. The majority of the letters are scattered across the page, brought together by a mental zig zaging connection. Its individualism yet connection to the other letters, is what in my mind, is so poetic about it. <3 Jason