CommentsComments 23661–23680 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

Just when I thought it couldn't get any better, you include an utterly random chorus at the end. Nice one!!!11
Is this about chair safety? It's brilliant.
The tradegy of war... I sometimes wonder whether the real tradegy isn't war, but you, and you're appalling poemes :(
Great use of "Nope" to rhyme with "kaleidoscope"!!11
Beautiful... what colour is hope?
Dovina on Or So They Say by avery 5 Dec 2004, 10:41 AM
Make the punctuation consistant and the last two lines moire forceful. Otherwise good.
richa replying on Dictionary Lesson by Dovina 5 Dec 2004, 9:30 AM
your problem is that you inferred when I said the poem used premises and conclusions, the conclusion I was talking about was the 'a compendium of evolution' one. Such an inference was not valid from my original post.
richa replying on Dictionary Lesson by Dovina 5 Dec 2004, 9:28 AM
Dark_Angel said snow is green is true. Snow is green is unproven. Please re-read my post to better understand this. In my previous post I showed how argument (errantly) had been used to make the conclusion (we are in love). Jesus, why are you being so gay. I read a poem, believed its structure resembled that of an logical argument (premise, premise, conclusion) in parts and commented likewise.
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. replying on Dictionary Lesson by Dovina 5 Dec 2004, 8:33 AM
No, no, no, no, no, no, no, no, no, no. Whether or not the poeme is a philosophical enquiry is not the point. Please recall your original guffhampton: "I believe this poem relates to philosophy in the sense that it puts forward premises which it uses to make conclusions." You claim this poeme puts forward premises which it uses to make conclusions. I claim it doesn't, and have been explaining why. Your latest dumpling has strayed from the point, and we won't get anywhere until you screw your head back on and address the point. Furthermore, you are *especially* especially thick for not understanding the difference between: A: Snow is green B: I, -=Dark_Angel=-, said the words "Snow is green". A is false. B is true: I said it just now. Please reread the previous post until you understand it.
Bachus on Into My World by sliver 28 Nov 2004, 7:53 PM
As opposed to into Uranus? I'm sorry but this is so ransacked with cliche, and trite nonsense that it's practically a zit cream commercial. For instance: "Rosebuds seem pale in your presence even when wet with my tears" Okay, what kind of fuck munch cries on a rose? Do you normally walk into a garden and find a rose to water with your contrived tears of woe? Your an ass. "Emotions swell when you're near yearning to be unfurled" I love your language here. Makes you sound like a black porn star named Harry Homellete.
travelingsk8er on youth in asia by suckmychucks 28 Nov 2004, 5:59 PM
uhhh.no
travelingsk8er on Wanksta by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 28 Nov 2004, 5:57 PM
really?? ....thats great
travelingsk8er on Tryst by <~> 28 Nov 2004, 5:54 PM
last line???
scary yat fascinating it gripped me the whole way through...thats good
travelingsk8er on my poetic thought by amanda3 28 Nov 2004, 5:52 PM
disconnected but flowing at the same time....nice
travelingsk8er on i was by skaskowski 28 Nov 2004, 5:50 PM
WoW! its great
7!3 on Breeze by Nicholas Jones 28 Nov 2004, 1:28 PM
i like how each line means the same thing, and yet you make it sound so beautiful. it's a peace poem. a nice breeze :)
7!3 on Searching by dougsoderstrom 28 Nov 2004, 1:23 PM
my opinion on your poem: curiousity killed the cat. that's why the black cat isn't there... you keep asking questions! ps; love this poem ; good one.
7!3 on A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus 28 Nov 2004, 1:11 PM
i'm not a big fan of long poems, but *your* poems are just too beautiful to miss.
Dovina on Jasmime by Lee Ho Chan 28 Nov 2004, 10:37 AM
Very real-sounding Chinese English voice. Too many redundant lines. Funny.