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wilco on The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus 28 Jul 2004, 10:09 AM

Hmmm, something about this that I like, even though it doesn't make any sense to me.

Venus replying on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus 28 Jul 2004, 9:27 AM

Thanks!

INTRANSIT on Untitled. by SupremeDreamer 28 Jul 2004, 9:12 AM

"I could not connect- and be absorbed in a stardust high" excellent line. the rest leaves me...unkempt.

INTRANSIT on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus 28 Jul 2004, 9:08 AM

Yes, I like the reform as well.

Venus replying on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus 28 Jul 2004, 8:30 AM

Thanks for the advice and rating!

Dan garcia-Black on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus 28 Jul 2004, 8:25 AM

The indentation differentiating between Then and Now works very well.

Venus replying on The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus 28 Jul 2004, 7:51 AM

Thanks. Which 2 commas?

Venus replying on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus 28 Jul 2004, 7:47 AM

Thanks, I will.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. on The Two Temperaments of Man by dougsoderstrom 28 Jul 2004, 7:37 AM

I think the fact that you have devoted your life to the pursuit of guff, whilst simultaneously trying to justify your folly by claiming to have chosen the humbler, more intellectual path to Jesu, is definitely one of your most undermocked qualities. The other being your appallingly low academic rank, which, despite all your efforts to convince us otherwise, is not bolstered by your incredible age. Your friend, Doug

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. on Dan by dougsoderstrom 28 Jul 2004, 7:14 AM

Yet another vast plethora of ellipses... as always your work bears the hallmark of "unbelievable talent" -10-

Shuushin on Untitled. by SupremeDreamer 28 Jul 2004, 6:40 AM

probably the most aptly "untitled" titled poem I've seen. Maybe it re-states itself once or twice too much - but somehow, that seems appropriate.

Stephen Robins on Untitled. by SupremeDreamer 28 Jul 2004, 6:30 AM

For such a wonderful grouping of words I award you the poemranker "hamper brimming with turds". In recognition of the number of ... used in those poem I award you the poemranker "used hanky of overstatement".

jessicazee on The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus 28 Jul 2004, 12:10 AM

Also, I love the title.

jessicazee on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus 28 Jul 2004, 12:08 AM

"Putty" doesn't need capitalization. Love "tank tops and yoga pants." Also, try it without the ellipese after the "Now"s.

jessicazee on The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus 28 Jul 2004, 12:06 AM

Intriguing and yessir, I like it. Kind of ambivalent about "you lost me at 'c'" - reminds me of Jerry Maguire unfortunately..."You had me at 'hello'"... Lose the 2 commas, the rest is gravy. 8.

electroman1979 on Bon Voyage by Jeremi B. Handrinos 27 Jul 2004, 9:04 PM

makes me hungry

Venus on Bon Voyage by Jeremi B. Handrinos 27 Jul 2004, 7:54 PM

yeah, i feel this one

Dan garcia-Black on Brats by D. $ Fontera 27 Jul 2004, 7:42 PM

I know it would be a major grammar gaff but I hear it as "He brat, She brat, You brat, Me brat." Even so, it's endearing.

Dan garcia-Black on Wake Up by unouluvme 27 Jul 2004, 7:34 PM

It seems to mean something to me, if I read it thusly, Wake up Sprint to burial grounds Pool around you let it be water Cards have spoken Donât wait walls will advance Worlds will shrink ears will give way Cling to a clichÃ© Kiss the poison as the antidote Speak expectations to listen Let fragrance engulf you Did you sleep? A poem of contradictions. Why not?

Dan garcia-Black on The Serpent People by horus8 27 Jul 2004, 7:19 PM

Yeah! Yea! Yes!