Prince of Void
on today the world is beauty by nentwined
29 Jul 2004, 1:34 PM
I understand what ur mood was ...we despair about our exsitence ..actully lost in the concept that is traceless without any clue ..at that moment the world is pretending of the beauty and glory has made us to think we are so weaker...then the whole world is
Simplicity create its own beauty ..I am not sheakespeare but honestly
that is a nice sonnet ...u are talented with bright future ..
that was good ..descriping why you are sorry ..is good ..i like it
That was good ..
that was good ...the poetry mean to be the way we understand what life is in the sense of the whole concept of what we are doing here and where we are going ..it's a nice poem in this way
That was beauty of you ..Poemgirl ..thanks
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It will drop because he expects it to drop.
Excellent! Having accepted my feedback as both honest and insightful, what are you going to do about it? And I just wanted to tell you that your last few pieces(poemes) have been unbelievably appalling. Thanks,
Your Friend,
Doug
Dear Dark Angel:
Thank you again.
Your Friend,
Doug
Dear Dark Angel:
Thank you very much as I have always appreciated your most honest and insightful feedback. And I just wanted to tell you that your last few pieces(poems)have been quite good.
The best to you.
Your Friend,
Doug
You've captured the "spirit" of that mess perfectly.
Respect paid to the good life they lived - get it.
To be or to ravioli??!! Oh gosh darn, I love those food metaphors! Sweet stuff.
Yeah...you've captured city life...nice work
Why is the bombshell gonna drop? Is she drinking too heavily?
I hear you. But it's no riddle. An "afflicted" woman is hearing some news. She doesn't hear the whole message because her mind is busy trying to justify her potential guilt. Too shrouded perhaps?
I like enough shrouding to let me draw my own conclisions, but I don't like riddles, and this reads like a riddle.
May it never drop, if not from this barfly, then some other. Cheers
I like to get a little feedback before explaining context, just to see if anyone can piece it together as-is. But feeling it is good too, yes?