horus8
on I'll Save You The Effort by wwFrasier Allonbyww
29 Apr 2004, 1:47 PM
Swit.
'imperfect' not unperfect.
congratulations
Look, I understand, how you feel, I get it all the time. But be serious, I don't have a clue who you are. Not bad on the poetry side though, deserving of a 7
Second stanza was great, but like a good burger it's trapped between bad buns.
Jeremi is a pleasant young man with supple breasts.
I like it not. There was no discernible meaning or humour.
Using the name everyone does not make the poem belong to everyone, therefore rating the poem does not mean I'm rating myself, therefore the last question is moot.
You'll appreciate this ...
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meta-thought?
DR E CARAWAX'S PROTOTYPE CHECKLISTE MARK II
[X] Arbitrary indentation
[X] Arbitrary linebreaks
[X] Melodramatic
[X] About romantic love
[X] Protaganist is a bummer
I'm crushed! I wrote it just for YOU!!
Ferociously Homosexual and trying too...