elizabethann
replying on forgetful dyke by elizabethann
17 Apr 2004, 2:30 PM
Thanks. Yes, it is fairly meaningless but I thought it was amusing. Oh and by the way, my mother is that and so much more.
seemz cliche. dunno why. maybe cause Ive read too many poems that say "life sucks"
It's more fucked over than a whore at a bachelor party
It is OK, relating of a fairly meaningless but nevertheless charming story. By the way unless your mum is a soul reever I very much doubt she 'brought you to life'.
richa
on The Idea of Fusion at the Beach (After Wallace Stevens) by coffeespoons
17 Apr 2004, 10:53 AM
Well written, has a nice feel. I am left a little confused by the ending. You go from language as fire to language as soft stanzas to language as the wind.
cool title, engaging read.
Was this a rewrite?
would be cool if u made this from the perspective of a small rodent.
i really think you could improve the broken car simile - other than that, really well done.
For everyone who doesn't already know, Elliott Smith committed suicide by stabbing himself in the chest with a knife.
is this a "yes", or a "I'm not playing anymore"?
bler blah bler blo ble blah? ble blah bler blo, fucking Asshat.
I really like it
Live life fast and get more life. Is that it? Well you've said it well, but it doesn't fit my frying pan. Slow and easy gets more done, I say.
I miss you, you were the best.
Cool huh? Internet poetry is better than heroin, and cheaper.
so lovely to read. i give it an eight.
it appears the real play is acted out in the gallery.
you might find your soul buried beneath your language skills if you bothered to look for them. I think the lack of sensation left in the wake of pain is a theme that CAN be handled without cliche, but it takes flawless execution to do so. And a bit more imagination.