some deleted user
on Riding High On My Ignore List by horus8
15 Apr 2004, 12:14 PM
Sorry, I just don't know this scene. No comment. No offense.
HAHAHAHA. Lovely
rife with cliche. cold as ice. forest for the trees. beg for forgiveness, pray for rain. I realize that this was probably intentional, as the whole poem is about "taking that leap" off the cliff, but still, it is hard to read so many without cringing a little. 6
horus8
on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac
15 Apr 2004, 11:41 AM
A Skilfully Skilless skillet. 10!
An aluminum spoon in a hurricane. 4
Fear of Garbage
on The Idea of Fusion at the Beach (After Wallace Stevens) by coffeespoons
15 Apr 2004, 10:37 AM
Haunting and arresting. Great first line.
No, this really is about a person.
I usually take this kind of thing too literally, but I see a horse here on her breath. But then how did you pick her up. Maybe a dog. Yes, it must be a loved dog. Yet, there's something more here about the physical state of our being winning out in the end.
Well.
I like it.
Grazie.
Yes.
They certainly do.
Oh. Okay.
Damn.
Now I think it's depressing.
Why do you pray for rain while standing on a cliff?
What does stanza 2 have to do with stanza 1?
Still, some good images here.
haha no, not really
I don't know!
is that a criticism or a compliment?
I never have any idea what you're talking about.
Forgetfulness, smoking. But mostly because all the characters are locked in preconceived boxes and won't even talk to each other.
MacFrantic
on On the Discovery of Cheez Wiz/The Day I Fell Off the Earth by MacFrantic
15 Apr 2004, 6:58 AM
I only changed the s's that have the "z" sound.
zodiac
replying on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac
15 Apr 2004, 6:45 AM
That's exactly what I was trying to skip by writing a - um - septina where EVERY WORD IS A LINE.