You sound like a real catch!!

Hey, I wanted you to know I thought this was a really well-written lyric reminiscent of the ______ian ramblings of Mr _______ with some clever half-rhymes too, but it's my policy to give any poem which refers to suicide an automatic zero. The reason I do this is that have good reason to believe that ninety-nine percent of suicidals are just attention-grubbing whiners who think they're fucking Kurdnt Kobbayne or Sylvia Plath and that giving them pity, praise, or any kind of attention at all only encourages their self-aggrandizing gothic tendencies. You say, what the fuck do you know, you fucking asshole? or something along those lines. To which I say, I know more people who've successfully (and unsuccessfully) committed suicide than you, and I've gotten sick to death of it. Don't come barking up my tree on this, I have rabies. Good day.

saw the original typed way, very cool man. The poem is a great to think about things

Sorry, castless should be cast-e-less. But the current meaning could be interpreted as if the world was devoid of people, or its "cast."

"The day after the end of the castless world" -- can you explain what this means?

This used to have a cool little off kilter structure but the poemranker submit box would'nt let me do it....stupid poemranker submit box.....

I liked the imagery but I got a little mixed and turned around while reading this. However, I think if you cleaned it up some, it would take away from the poem instead of adding to it. I think it's one of those that I have to keep reading several times over.

concise and beautiful

Although I'm not a big fan of rhyme like this, I liked some of the imagery, in particular "My ceiling holds secrets concealed..."