New Life Drug
on lullaby by the indign
1 Apr 2004, 6:48 PM
...until you get raped in the middle of the night
A cute story, light and a bit humorous. That's probably an insult, but I'm more than a bit older.
this reminds me of this guy that's always looking at me..its kind of creepy.. but like.. he's kinda cute.. so maybe i should talk to him, i dont want him to feel stupid.
I wish I'd used 'chronic' for the rhyme instead of 'Hashanah' -- or, alternately, 'marijuana', 'Madonna' or 'Hosannah!' instead of 'colonic'. I just feel like it's a letdown after the great opening rhyme of 'being one' and 'penguin'. Which do rhyme down here, incidentally.
ah ha.
this made me smile..
you gonna fix this so I can give it a score? or what.
"sorority"
Sure, I get it.
Four spelling errors.
Is the ending counter-intuitive, or am I missing something?
I wasn't trying to rhythm, more like tell a story and get a message across
yep. that works.
Sad, but - thankfully - short (this kind of thing can get old quickly)
too "listy" - yes, I made that word up.
Gimme so flow, gimme some "poetry".
hey aliena, good descriptors - now you just need to say something with them.
I was off-put in the very first line because I have never "imagined from every angle in my mind." It's a bit much. But as you move along, it's quite sweet, and I'm quite jealous.
SupremeDreamer
replying on A wicked rose grows in God's grapevine. by SupremeDreamer
1 Apr 2004, 3:44 PM
The joke? or that you don't give a shit? Nah, I don't get it, and I'm not trying to. Maybe you should forgo the quiz and get on with what you seem to earnestly hint at, and just reveal the little factor that eludes me in my oblivion.
My "earnest" attack isn't anthing but empty blithering defense typed out so as to not pass the time in idle dawdling.
Hmmm. Strong methinks - strong.
and "have" should be "have" - you knew that, right?
sheep is as sheep does. not baaaa-ahd.
SupremeDreamer
replying on I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer
1 Apr 2004, 3:07 PM
You've just handed down unto my drafty dome a divine prophesy, which is to my disillusioned eyes as cataclysmic, if not even more so, than the Book of Revelations.
But as for basing my career on RM's poetical trasmission of voting warts of "10"? Means my "career" was without some sort of base before his invansion of poemranker with his despicable dirt-encrusted clicker brigade... But we both know that I was just as arrogant and ego-bloated before the coming of the Rockmage, in the days then my scores were in the dismal mudpit.
And RM isn't the one who has drowned my posted pieces with votes that drastically affected my scores- CLS was the one who was the last to shower me with a flood of tens as a idiotic cop-out when I revealed her hypocritical/illogical and random barrages of zeros on one or two particular pennames of mine, and only tens given to the other aliases of mine. So she changed her votes to tens in order to appease me, which only deepened my disgust and frustration, utimately leading me to discontinue the barrage, then dismiss the hope of some explaination of her actions.
My voting score/average was first built with the scars of past zeroing and various discriminative votes, and then only a few months ago endured spastic zeros and genial tens from two main clicker empowered forces and various lone vigilante(s). The mind-less character of voting caused me to look 'pon my score/average as irrelevant and unrelated over-all to my actual writing quality in a little over a mere month & 1/2 after having joined the ranker.
I like to think my career is based on the comments recieved in response by all, even yours, and how I drove myself onwards with my bulging pimples of confidence and zany hyperboles, intermixed with regular acts of idiocy or intentional mindless-ness.
As for my need of your cold rough hands to offer a brutal public fisting? Thats mostly a masochistic need that also offers a reason to declare war and busy myself with in endless amounts of arguement and babble; it fills the idle hours when I'm not otherwise motivated to pen s'more poems, prose etc. or formal turd-defacement of others.
But your comment is one of many which could be joined together in a one combined account of my comic saga, entitled "Rigor-Pen'd Quarrels & Tribulations of a Farcical, Dim Trifler."
_end rant transmission_