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on The back of a shovel? by horus8
17 Jan 2004, 6:11 PM
Damn, reminds me of my friend....the sad pathetic yet poetic soul.
Yes, I always was a quick lay, thanks.
"Then..." I think?
good one.
Physics, taoism, and the merry making of old english 40's.
Horus you are a visionary! It's like you know the real me!
are you single? Or just rampant? Thanks for the commentary. I hope you enjoy my misspellings and overreacins.
[from The Banned Diaries Of Sir Arthur Weatherby-Browne]
Alone in the yard, beyond the last of the wilting Azaleas, lies The Outhouse. A place of solitude, and of shame; see how it basks in its filth, taunting me with its soiled bounty. How many loved-ones have fallen there? Swallowed whole by its endless hunger for the browne? I'm wearing pyjamas now. Sieve in hand - the Earth will not claim this treasure! I lower my pants. And lay dung...
Trapped in the sieve! Writhing like a worm on a hook! My darling! I carry the beloved filtrate back to the bedchamber, there to bathe it, and clothe it in silk. But kicking and screaming, ever tethered to an old man's beard - that is no life for a crumbling stool!
Hands clasped in prayer, and weeping, I watch it ride off in its chariot. Black against the setting sun. Wrapped in a veil.
Nay, it's actually a small child doing cherry pickers off of a rusty tank turret in a field somewhere in Bosnia at dusk.
hahaha oh so funny. YOu missed your calling!! A poet with a sense of humor oh well at least you have a sense of humor you can't have it all.
Actually, I thought it was the twist of a blade and the warmth of blood running down one's wrist, collecting at the elbow, then streaming off.
My friend you have been misinformed we all know love is an exploding american soldier on a tenspeed in the middle of some sand niggered hell hole.
Sure it wasn't knocked up to look down?
Yeats huh? Yeah right.
Tell me though what were the 'radicals' arranging? Another stupid fucking 7 Eleven for you and your friends to stand in front of after school?
The best thing about this poem is your name.
I like the first three stanza's quite a lot, but the end doesn't cut it.
What are you saying, that the whimsy of a sentient fungus is not just a metaphor and this is a horror poem? Or are you alluding to the effects of poison/hallucinogenic mushrooms -- if so it could be sketched much better.
But you taught me a new word, that's pretty rare, lol.
Nitpick: no need to say great when in the next line you say colossal.
Seems to flow well bar the last verse. A little unremarkable though - would get a few marks on the dark angel mediocrity scale perhaps.
inspired by the clearest day ,looking across a lake in nz and dreaming