imperfect_creation
replying on EXIT (this way) by imperfect_creation
16 Jan 2004, 2:51 PM
thank you. I will look into it.
"they're" means "they are" dosn't it? I was talking about the tears being gone with the people they were for. (them refering to tears) is that not right???
Glad you feel inspired. Will change strick to stricken and mistiful to.. Mistful. I think.
Salt mositure, I believe, needs reconsidering: but growl for sleep, I like. Doesn't it sound like a hungry belly? Thanks. :)
It was a given work. I like that you can kind-of feel it, and it's a bit wearing. But thank-you.
Yeah that happens but I never really had a problem with it. This is about my aunt who is just closed minded and set in her ways. I spent a month at her house and although she's a really nice lady she likes to talk about things she doesn't know about. She gets most of her (mis)information from church groups and neighbors. It's sad but doesn't do any harm so I'm just not bothering with it.
I think it is one of the great tragedies of society that on the playground the word "gay" is synonymous with "filthy urchin". Can't children find something better to do during playtime than tearing madly about the place calling each other "gay"? It's extremely damaging because some of those children will actually be homos and, before you know it, they'll be taken in by all the hype and might start to believe that there is something "filthy" and "urchin-like" about being a "raving bender". Which there isn't. Thanks and God Bless.
This piece sounds very forced. As a poete, when you end up with lines like "My state of mind is a real disgust" or "Till I can heal my burn" you really ought to be asking yourself "Have I been praying enough?".
Well?
Have you?
Because if you haven't, how can you possibly hope to come up with good, rhyming lines through the love of Christ without compromising on the sheer absurdity quotient? A good effort, though! -7-
There is an art to crude imagry. This doesn't cut it.
it looks like a computer randomly generated this from a livejournal.
And Apu said "Come Again"
http://members.aol.com/lucyhardng/pointers/index1.htm is a cool rescource too.
Isn't repeating the sounds of consonants called consonance?
i m just a beginner
Hmmm, You had me right up to "Placental Debris" over all not bad, but not great either.
It kinda sounds like your pissed about something. If thats the case get in touch with that because it doesn't really show here.
WOW I totally dont get it. But thats nothing new Haiku frequently confuse me. However it is fun to read
This is interesting, at least it makes a good read.
Sorry mate. I jt dont get it.
Speaking from the majority pretending conservitive right. HELL YA!
I like it. its honest.
Very Funny I like it
Thanks for the honest Apraisal.