grumpycrafter
on ~haiku~ by Entelechist
8 Dec 2003, 5:04 PM
So, this is haiku. It's certainly discriptive.
I like it.
Expressive poem. I could see the blackthorn thickets and your father removing the thorns. I really loved it.
agreed. Thanks.
Scarcely an image in the entire poem. I want to believe you I do. But its so distant, just words.
Liquid sadness is a little crude a description. A teardrop drowns the world? why rain (the sky weeps) does not drown the word.
I know what you are trying to say but it just doesn't seem to track.
No sir. I never mentioned Horus8 in that response to which you speak. My interjection: I thought the heckling had gone on quite enough. It was like two siblings caught up in a "he said - she said" blaming game that got them both sent to bed without dinner. You do have a tendency to defend yourself at every comment made - good or bad, and yes, I have noticed those that give you regular grief. Chill pills are a good thing. Learn to let go. Come up for air once in a while and breathe deeply. Stress kills.
Agreed, but I think you jumped to the conclusion that I was the one who started all that with Horus08, when it is he who has a fascination with starting shit with me. Also, there is a difference between criticism and plainly rude bullshit. I don't tolerate the later and strike back when ever it's presented.
The last time I witnessed a 'moment' wishing? My foot fell off and called me a cornholer.
The last time I looked beside me? There was a hobo taking a shit in this lady down the streets Jade plant.
How did I miss this sensitive poem, like the last 3 #s on my cmputer 151 I must of had one too many shots of it we celebrate all the rest of the year..I got my head clear now a jump in the ocean and fresh guava passion fruit xtra vitamins smoothy will do that. I reeeealy like this Yes karma is eternal but some souls are worth it. Under radar you must have your own radar better than a hoary bat to pull this of being able to pull it of you must feel the intruders body heat from afar have acute hearing be very brave and in love not just lust cuz you can get thaty at any grocery store.
If you knew it all alonf no respect you must have a surplus of the stuff..I COMAND respect lick my high heels NOW!!I dont have any regrets but I want a laaarge bed, rose petals and a "family jewel encrusted septer" for at least 24 hours ,skip the couc,-
the kitchen,sink keep the toasies they don't stink!!!BRING IT On santa baby!!!!XXXXa whisper te amo is not enough. a 10
I had a date like that once. I saw her but for a fleeting moment halfway around the world - and then I woke from a dream. Nice but disturbing memory.
Nice, although I misplaced my Shigley. Your title reminds me of a question I ask when interviewing Engineering Co-ops. "Why is a manhole cover round, vs. any other geometric shape?" Good for checking the thought process.
Thanks, I appreciate and can deal with constructive criticism. It's the mindless shit that gets in the way.
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Lets not kill each other for now lets wayt till va
I liked your bravadoelentines day massacre 04. Hatred grrrrrr so passionate...There's more weed...kiss the stubborn sob I got one he's my pop's and hades was so afraid of letting him in that death turned it's back got paid of by satan. he survided a 11 hour operation, pulled he's breathing and nasal/g tube's out no -shit in intensive care /and is now meaner than ever..those pale as blue ice eyes of he's mean bussiness/ walking talking and kicking the doct's asses Kiss and love the ole bastard till v-day chucle. have a great xmas hope santa brings you some maui wowie or kauai electric. a 9
Was the monk my" saint" Rasputin/you are a Hungarian gypsy by blood can't get a transfusion.Think I found your soul clinging to mine on an agust night..This is more like you Passionate,bohemian,walking,thinking composing.Tarot the morning star.Ahhhhh holding it in the fresh dirt/musky smell of the grave yard arousing to those of us who have a pulse.This poem is fine and you are forever MINE. more than a nine 10
Sooooo you liked the lip biting comment I do have a special cognizance and only IF [I like you alot and you taste divine.. BIG SMILE] On lip or bites of all kinds hard it depends on the moment but Lucy my brow is arched, it's the unholy days so here you go one for each jugular not toooo hard, and a nip for that upper lip since I got the bottom one last time gigle's.
I-sis the morning star is shining, you have little faint lavender bites on your sevres shoulders.leaving the fragrance of MYHRR,a dash of sulfur you love that hmmm? and gardenia my calling card I will dance thru your balcony like a bachante and disapear till next time as you sleep.Your comment was on 11/29 I was in Orcus with my mau [egyptian cat spotted striped.] you where in Paris?lol.Are you feeling dicrotic poor devil.
Drop the fear i go south like most godesses in the winter i'll come back to hold you tight and bite you harder wink..a 10
a nice pothead snapshot. Funny.
reminds me of a newstory I read last week about a guy who wanted to eat someone so he put an ad in the paper and someone responded. They ate the guys arms together then he killed the doner and ate the rest of him. All consentual (the guy still got in trouble, seems murder is *illegal*).
true story.
This is quite good. A bumping cadence that keeps things interesting.