richa
replying on Lesson in Wickedness by eyrbare
21 Nov 2003, 3:00 PM
The question was for eyrbare, but I would have thought getting up to z on this delightful puzzle would be extremely difficult!
Cracking
Werewolving my tears
back at the moon. I race through thickening
changings and habits too sooned.
class !
Huh, that was a neat hybrid.
the following don't rhyme: start/star; romance/occupants; would; hollywood
another revision may be in order.
like it, can you get up to Z???
yes. Also: when the ache of ancestors happens before death, cattyness can be cancelled and life dictated, instead.
bravo.
P.S. Sorry to lead you on. I'm no collegiate.
Can visualize the scene very well. Good job! =D
Thanks. I have been reading Wilfred Owen lately and his stuff hits real hard.
Roger that - but I think the misspellings somehow work here, no - no worries.
As to my publishing career - time will tell; I claim no special [mad skilz] or credentials for the value of my comments. Usually people feel something amiss then the crit is just an echo of that.
[cue music] My only desire is to honestly convey constructive crits whenever it's possible (though sometimes... they... [the voices]... force me...).
The only thing I don't like about this is its' quasi-repetetive nature. I thumbed through your file. Write more please.
Best war poem I've read in a while. Your development becomes you.
I read a poem the other day, about some guys sailing in a boat. Apparently one in a fit of excitement cut off his bum!
As a result the boat became marooned and the sailors died a slow death of starvation. That is all except for the one that chopped off his bum. He was made to spend eternity repeating his tired old comments and single joke.
Any ideas DA?
GOod Shieet!!!
well i appreciate your comment and ur vote.
i know that i mispelled words but i wanted to write freely and carlessly.
i wrote wat ever came to mind.
i was at my grandmothers house and i went down to the libary to use a computer.
there was no spell check and i didnt feel the need to go an edit anything i typed it in the last 5 minutes of libary comp time.
i pressed submit and let it go.
any ways thanks i hear ur a editor or something to do with a magazine.
so i respect ur comment.
unguarded.
A better edit.
Thanks alot. This is the kind of comment I came to this site hoping for, but instead I was bashed and ridiculed by some of the members. Namely Dark Angel. Again thanks. I'll work on a revision.
Not yet. It's kind of a long term goal to someday in my life get there.
the hawk was looking at the top of my head(poll) or "sizing me up"
gaze on gaze-- looked each other in the eye
grinding line-- straight ground transportation.
but do these things warrant a higher score? I know I shouldn't base everything on this rating chart, it's just convenient.
10-Q