Don-Quixote
replying on The Wrath of Dan Ackroyd by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
6 Oct 2003, 4:47 PM
Ah..
Well that doesnt make much of a change now does it!- toodles.
P.S. Egg.
I can't help reading your poetry. It's like watching someone being mangled in a combine harvester.
Don-Quixote
replying on Ravens Flight - Voices of Spite (My First Ever Vilanelle) by Don-Quixote
6 Oct 2003, 4:43 PM
did you ever think id take a crack at the vil?
i didnt, but then i looked in the mirror and i realized that my goatee was getting greasy.
maybe i should ponder tackling a sestina next?
?-Dave_Mysterious-?
replying on Life on the Sidewalk (with superfluous vulgarisms) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
6 Oct 2003, 4:40 PM
Look, despite my upbringing on the bad side of town, I have an IQ of almost 109. I think it's time you stopped trying to wrestle with the intellectual giants.
Incredible.
Christ! Where's my visine?
Idiot. I was using Dan Ackroyd as a metaphor for John Candy.
Jeremi B. Handrinos
replying on Ravens Flight - Voices of Spite (My First Ever Vilanelle) by Don-Quixote
6 Oct 2003, 4:34 PM
ha haaaaaha hahahha haha haha I thought it was a metaphor for soloflex? Ha ha ha ha. 7.
Don-Quixote
replying on Ravens Flight - Voices of Spite (My First Ever Vilanelle) by Don-Quixote
6 Oct 2003, 4:32 PM
my inner lawyer was mush when my inner devil proved he could bring about more suffering that he.
and the bastards whip cracks 'long with the lawyers groans are soon going to compell me to swipe my universe clean and create less irritating bastages as my underlings.
So, on judgement day you shall deliver unto us a punchline?
shucks, all that puffin to say that? waste of wind sir, now my funny bones quiver.
heres a 7.
Ponderous, yet somehow still very tactile. -8-
?-Dave_Mysterious-?
on Ravens Flight - Voices of Spite (My First Ever Vilanelle) by Don-Quixote
6 Oct 2003, 4:26 PM
I like the way you used the lawyer as a metaphor for incest. -9-
You might say that it was a libation liason.
3 powdered donuts, a haircut, and sex with my left hand.
Great call, I will for my next edit, tanks mang.
i didnt like my ending, but i had nothing else in my bag that felt right.
yep, good- but it could use smoothening like ~ said.
heres an eight.
"dress rehearsa"
i did not title it.. ;P
Don-Quixote
on Ravens Flight - Voices of Spite (My First Ever Vilanelle) by Don-Quixote
6 Oct 2003, 3:37 PM
not too bad i think.. actually, it wasnt that hard- once i grasped the flow of it.. oh well, theres going to be more since i had fun writing one.