http://mulberryfairy
replying on Plastic is Forever by http://mulberryfairy
15 Sep 2003, 9:25 AM
Yeah, I know, that is how I feel about it too.
I laughed. 7.
Ah; I understand your comment better now, and I'm flattered. Thank you. :)
5/6 of this is (obviously) yours
1/6 had not been put into words before
I like this, though I can't think why. 9.
it stumbles at the beginning but picks up rhythm as it goes. why the gawdoffal speeling? but with a rhythm tuck and a spelling fix, I think this would be really nice. 7 as it is.
14. more poetry, less grocery list
I need more to see if you're saying something interesting. Some work on the flow of it would make people more willing to listen to whatever message you have.
I think the "big words" are trying too hard for something that's been said too much. Though "cloven wings" has me curious. ?
very cute. :)
why the "u" for "you"? is it part of the point of the poem, or do you think it's "cool"?
previous comments apply minus the "starring" (was the "u" there before? :/)
I'm not sure exactly what this poem is about, or maybe it's about a whole bunch of things all at once, but there were some cool lines toward the end, so I give it a nine.
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very nicely done; I'm not insulted at all. could you point me to the original of what you blended?
Oh yeah I see a little kid waving his arms around in a temper trantrum like in the store. Hehe love it.
Way to reach out for attention.
Says exactally what you want it to. Short and to the point. I'm liking it, here's a ten.
Thank you brother. To bad I'm the one that got you started in poetry huh? :P
TheVoiceless
replying on Love has been awoke. (edited, needs new title) by TheVoiceless
15 Sep 2003, 1:57 AM
Missing. Little typo seems everyone has those at times.
TheVoiceless
replying on Love has been awoke. (edited, needs new title) by TheVoiceless
15 Sep 2003, 1:54 AM
Now that... That is the type of comment that I like to see. I could careless about the votes. Sure they're nice to see, but don't mean near as much.
Good poems don't always need big comments. But if they made the reader think something then say it. Or gave you an idea yourself, the same.
I'm rambling, I however do thank you. I'm going to copy this comment and read it a few times. Ofcorse I'm going to be rewriting my poem while reading the comment. I give you a 10 on your comment. :)
I think she means that she has no belief in men at all.