-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Nicholas Martin by horus8
12 Sep 2003, 5:08 PM
If Settle really was dead, he wouldn't want you to weep all over his tribute poeme, you mediocre simpleton.
wtf? really?
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that is very sad to hear.. and leaves me, a man of words
with very little of any value to say.
chaos is the only pefection the universe knows. To organize lawfully in order to destroy repeatedly.
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on To those who'd share their heartfelt feelings with the world by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
12 Sep 2003, 4:58 PM
'Oh.'
no, he is a meth addict from california.. and he would never join the army. :) But i kill for free, aslong as uncle sam doesnt get in my fucking way.
judgement day has been a big topic lately.. and i figured that folks need a more "offensive" perspective on it.
im pissed, i am a cannibal.. want to have some jesus with me?
i dont serve wine.. i serve blood
fresh and warm straight from
the source of divinity.
-evil grin-
Get rid of stupid bitch. Otherwise the best thing you've written. Seriously. Oh, and it's "your life in ruins" How about "Everybody's bound to meet their fate"? You hold your rythmn and don't let go. It's all grown-up.
Jesus tastes good.. he only needed a spice crazed chef like me to give him some "kick"
EAT ME. haha.
SupremeDreamer
replying on maternal-infant bonding (rejection) by SupremeDreamer
12 Sep 2003, 4:35 PM
actually, no, i was just thinking about the subject and my imagination spilled this onto paper.
SupremeDreamer
replying on maternal-infant bonding (rejection) by SupremeDreamer
12 Sep 2003, 4:33 PM
yeah, it still gives me the chills everytime i look at it... then i remember i wrote it, and i grin like the cold hearted bastard i am.
Dreamer,
I liked this! Is this guy a private in the army who comes from West Virginia? Best fucking killers are always rebels. They've got the most balls and instinctively know when to strike their prey. Thier a bitch to control and manage, but they get the fucking job done! "You see shooting squirrels......" is a great fucking verse! Nice Job -9-
And eviction. but for your age attempting a vilanelle is brave and noteworthy, congratulations, but you spell for shit.
You are way ahead of your time. for a fifteen year old, this is a remarkable piece.
some deleted user
replying on To those who'd share their heartfelt feelings with the world by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
12 Sep 2003, 3:32 PM
No. But you smell of me.
It almost seems to be more of a rant. But it works, and some of the things are so off the wall. I love it.
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on To those who'd share their heartfelt feelings with the world by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
12 Sep 2003, 2:39 PM
You're gay.
I like it!
Yeah, in thinking about your previous comment, I was wondering how it would be if I just left out those last lines. Somehow, I wanted to convey that I wasn't truly convinced of the stuff above... but I think maybe you're right. Thanks
in the meantime
I'll keep typing
to amuse myself
and unload some baggage
maybe I'll stumble over perfection on the way
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That sums up what I've been reading in editors notes lately. A lot of editors say that poetry is getting longer and dragging on with everyone typing this day and age. Its just so easy for them to keep typing and typing I've found it to be true. Its all to easy to just keep going. It was never like that when I was hand writing everything.
I believe the poem would say as much if not more taking the lines from above totally out of it. Or maybe...
In the meantime
I'll keep working towards perfection,
Perhaps stumble upon it along the way.
wasn't really trying to be funny at the end - was looking for a way to wrap it up - thanks for the comment