razorgrin
on A Fistful of Haiku at School by HaikuMofo
12 Sep 2003, 6:57 AM
Markie was wearing the skirt the other day. The word 'shanty' always makes me break into giggles. Now the computer lab's looking at me funny.
The lobefucker one was delightful. i'm jealous you beat me to the subject.
Aww..cutie flower chick. you must find her. Who's the hottie in your room?
Geez, you guys are supposed to be aspiring poets here. Has nobody heard of a glosa before? It starts with a quatrain, right, from another author. Of course you credit the person who wrote it. Then there are four ten-line stanzas, the last line of each referring back to the lines of the original quatrain in the order they appear. And there is no silent e at the end of poem.
Jesus wont forgive me
and if he does
ill shoot him
and eat his holy flesh
after i marinate it
in green sushi salsa
OK? OK? DOES GOD STILL LOVE ME?
I couldnt give a shit either way.
"I have nothing against Jews but at the end of the day they are dominant in ALL business interests from fabrics to weaponry"
Any phrase that starts 'I'm not racist / misogynistic / anti-semitic BUT' is inevitably evidence of racism, misogyny or anti-semitism. The poem is incredibly offensive, and your justification scarcely less so.
I absolutely believe in freedom of speech, so you have the right to say what you like, but I have the right to disagree. You can write far better poems than this. Try harder.
You should teach him how to stand on his face, 'professionally', like you do.
Awww how cute your diaper is leaking. Interesting poem man... here's an 8
I wrote one about 9/11 too does that make me a cad as well?
Wanted to write it about the loved one I lost, but the words just wouldn't come. I wouldn't allow myself to be greedy and see only with my eyes saying mememe. So I had to try to see from everyones eyes on the event. Not an easy thing to do and I likely pissed the whole poem down my leg.
I find it hauntingly poignant that you chose to post this on September 11th, the very day on which the Events of September 11th took place. 10.
Ten things about this poeme that make it the most bland and mediocre thing I have ever read:
1. The constant use of two thirds of an ellipsis.
2. Typographical errors.
3. Reference to an obscene sex dream.
4. Mismatched and overwrought metaphor.
5. Contains a fridge but no ham.
6. The worst possible sort of tedious self-obsession.
7. An unimaginative and frankly insensitive title.
8. Hypocritical overuse of prepositions.
9. The category is 'Free verse'.
10. You're wrong, and you're a grotesquely ugly freak.
Thanks.
Gritty.
Just one day at a time.
But being materialistic is great.
Damn that's fine craftsmanship Seany boy. Guess who's at my house? My mom. Heeky noodly do. Isn't that odd? I'm finding closure. lol
Becoming.
Do you wish me to cry? Or are you just an oarless crank.
Maybe you should wash your face? lol. Or just buy a bidet.