thepinkbunnyofdoom
on Death Wish by Kitch
19 Jul 2003, 2:59 PM
Wow.. You do suck. I mean even at sucking. This is merely Mediocore. Not good, not bad. Just there.
Oh I realise that you don't feel I'm among the top ten poets here. Thats my opinion not yours(As you'd say blowing smoke up my own ass). Still I'm more poetic than you'll ever give me credit for being. Just a statement. Not meant to be offensive, just stated.
Excellent writing. -10-
You mean like how you are in the top ten poets on this site and stuff? lol? Why do you need me to give you credit? I believe you blow enough smoke up your own ass for the two of us, you don't need my approval, you're a chirping testament to your own misconceptions. Perhaps, you just need a trophy for your mantel, or a minion to serve you up a dose of a reality. That being a slice of humble pie and a pair of glasses, because, you my friend, are on the freeway of happy meals and franchised clowns on the bike of denial.
Touching, but more details please. Why is this Joe So important to you, Who the hell is he? That type of stuff.
Only if its breaded first, and you bring the special brownies for dessert.
Maybe its...
Cuz, I can't seem to wake up
Stuck in a state of dazzling daydreams
Could be I'm so fucked up
From all the bud I've been blazing
Or the lack there of
Stuck in my lungs
I don't think your in the same state of mind
But yeah our locations aren't far apart
By the way, Have you ever heard of a band called the Random Heros?
want some fried shrimp?
I'm currently needing a detox, Right now my mind is so blurred that thoughts and Ideas make no sense to me, and I'm feeling paranoid. Paranoiya and my writing are not really good friends.
i understand ...
i currently have nothing to offer
maybe it's cuz i never had it
or it's all this weed
i've been smoking
or the weed i have not
been smoking
maybe it's cuz we both live in the
same boring state
This coming from the False Apollo? I'm still more poetic than you'll ever give me credit for.
awww lil wabbit, dont worry, i got a case of writers block aswell.. after the monk and ballerina poems my brain had an overload and short circuited... lets just say my heads a bowl of fried shrimp. ;P
Usually, one must possess something in order to lose it. Glad to see you bucking trends. Maybe what you thought was a poetic edge was actually a ruptured strawberry flavored condom, and now your face is pregnant?
But thanks anyway! And good shabbas to you! Please, try to take it easy until sundown, and if you have to drive, put an ice tray under your driver's seat.
lol, you must have me mistaken for your toothbrush? I am as Jewish as you are a sprinter
I respect the pathos but this really lacks focus.
It might be scarey. But, it might be better, too. I don't believe in the myth that an artist has to be in pain to do good work. That is what our memory is for.
Take a 7 for reminding me of how terrifying it is to grow up and how much better I am for having done it!
Wow, you are certainly at the peak of your creativity!!!!!!1
A pity the same can't be said of your maturity, Jeremi. Or should I say Jewremi. Jew.
This is great. Inventive rhyme scheme and phrasing, and such great images. This is inspiring.
This has missed my heart altogether.