<{Baba^Yaga}>
on Untitled #43 by david
4 Jul 2003, 1:05 PM
Distinctive.
It is, yes. I'm surprised; I thought it would be fairly obvious. It's interesting to hear the other interpretations, though.
Do you mean "your" in the Ebonical singularly posessive, or was that just one of those typos we all hate tremendously Margaret?
12,000 but who's counting. An enjoyable read.
Precisely.
An honorable path. A good poem.
Upbeat for once, fucking hell HORUS, by the way ...7.
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(Don't let margaret see this)
you can never really tell if it's a crappy poem or not as you cannot even understand it, except maybe if you speak the language. is it that bad that i enjoy using my language to make poems or is it because it frustrates you to not know what i'm saying? it's funny though, you guys have been busting your brains over this. quite funny indeed. anyway, say what you like, say what you think, the bottom line is ... sticks and stones... and all that crap!
Have a nice day ;)
irreverent, funny role reversal
do you mean L-DOPA in the title?
the drug given to people with parkinsons that made them all schizophrenic
fine selection of language, the traditional with the new
the final line is good about the sword through the ventricles of a heartland. Streams as veins. I think the pneumatic part is mixing metaphors though.
this is definitely one of your best
this needs a bit more of you in it, the lack of originality detracts from the feeling you want to get across.
what I do like about this is the rhythm and sonority, even though you don't appear to be explicitly rhyming your words.
A bit saccharin like, its not poo but a bit like the verses in the 50 cent card shops 4
Pure class porkie ass, roast this 10
a crap poem masqueraded in a foreign language to try and make it look better 0
No dots are needed between JCB
Only you can do a Haiku with a title like this. Your f****g nuts but I'm nuts for your stuff 8
That's the point!
Hi its hte cunt here,
You are not Horus, Bachus or Jermi Handrinos so you are the cunt, I mean click in to your user name and you've wrote one poem? the real jeremi b handrinos has written loads of poems,
as i respect horus this is his vindication from any misinterpreted slurs on his good character,
yours sincerely
the cunt cadUcus