capachijim
on American Idol epiphany in haiku by Shardik
11 Jun 2003, 7:09 PM
WHAT??
what the hell do you mean?
how is that naughty?
de clin ed right?
sorry I didn't mean to write unbareab..I was in a hurry and I meant unbareable.
powerful. lovely. grapey.
a few typos, trite and stolid. I'm sure it was nice for you at the time.
Powerful and succinct. Nicely done. deserves a 10.
Glad I bought the double roll of toilet paper.
still off on syllables, but who's counting?
definitely better. 10 for you.
nice jop. I like this.
it should be "you're" a contraction for "you are" not "your" which is a possessive pronoun.
after that, try some more substance, more specific details, images, etc.
click on "best" at the top and read through those. you can learn a lot here.
I was. thanks for spoiling it. the ambiguity has ruined the excitement. one word for you:
STOLID. look it up.
hows that? what would you do here, do you think?
Excellent response.
weak. it is screaming "teenager" and is so full of extra words and so lacking in images, freshness, or poetry.
I agree. don't forget to soak yourself in chum.
It reminds me of an eminem song, only without the line breaks.
Heeker.