boy oh boy you are firing these off today! nice one.

your wit made me laugh. out loud. honestly.

You are a Gentlemen, thank you very much.

Dear Robert It was this you composed so majestically that I love. Waves fold on the beach Sand clings to the old dead man Filling his wrinkles Its timeless.

Thank you very much <{Baba^Yaga}> for the advice. Ah, I'd better get back to the drawing board, then...

I could teach you the art of poetry for a small fee. The fee would be your love draped over my broad Greek shoulders.

So you are saying what? Start over, and try concentrating on specific subjects that do not include yourself. A book, a bird, a cafe, your period, your breasts, your beautiful pissed off pursed lips. Anything but self regret and suicide those feeling need to leak naturally into your work and not contaminate the entirety of the piece all at once. Do you have beautiful pursed lips by the way?={;}

I am learning. I've learned that I need to try a different type of poetry. Starting over! Thanks for the comments. :)

Why'd you pull your poem down? Don't you want to learn?

I mean get rid of it--change it. strive for freshness in language. I apologize for my ambiguity.

I thought about the bareness. I think there were system probs last night. we couldn't gt on line this mornin'.