RealmOfSong
on Those Crazy's people in my brainsky by Shardik
10 Jun 2003, 10:46 AM
I like this one, it's funny ^_^ And I like the repetition of "-sky"
The end was funny... ^_^ The cyclic thing kinda depresses me sometimes... I'd rather for it to just stop, rather than to die and then wake up and have to do it all over again.
Keanu cracks me up... ^_^
lose the commas.
Yes it would.
perhaps. a very zen-like poem. excellent job! 10 atrs
the meaning of life revealed.
No I couldn't eat another bite. oh sir, it is only a wafer thin mint. it's wafer thein, oh, all right. munch grumble stretch BOOM!
If they didn't contain completely different words, I'd say this was plagiarised from my epic piece "Enabled". -10-!!!
I love the smurf collection.
is this about kissing your mom?
what about the gorilla?
Yes -- "guys in jersies playing elementary school recess games". Such a poignant observation... I... I don't normally cry, but *choke*... well, I guess it just...
I'm not sure jet fuel is kerosene.
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an upstate new york area code, but not a haiku scheme.
I was in a bizarre kite flying accident.
by that argument, he is a loser also. unfortunately the dichotomy has been lost in the silly tone of the last line.
stomach
great concept, but redundant. you essentially say the same thing twice.
syllables?