Shardik
on Lonely Soul by sir_heff
30 May 2003, 12:02 PM
Yes, rhyming brain with again gives me a buzz, always.
i love it
found my self singing along :) -9-
very moving -9-
Are you going to admit you were wrong or not? An Gentleman would.
that's memorable!
memeorable lines!liked it extremely!
h'm?
what? please im glad this isnt longer
ma nu sure do like writtin bout dissease of the world dont u
No. At least I don't think so. Ive learned in the past that i have trouble making that call. but usually i can be sure that im not. its more of really screwing up and thinking i am. wait... what was i talking about? oh yeah. No.
Very nice
Well actually I won't post it because I have done my three for this week. But here it is.A Rainstorm Over Angeloâs Cafe
(18/5/2003)
To live, is to be part of all that lives.
To feel within your soul the greater beat
of beauty in a world spread at your feet,
and be ennobled by the joy it gives.
The distant hills, greyed by the Summer rain,
the thunder telling tales of hidden might,
the swallows as they flick their magic flight,
the cat watching the sparrows peck at grain,
contribute in their own entrancing ways
to bless the moment and its joyous kiss,
that leaves a lingâring memory of bliss,
and stirs my mind to symphonies of praise.
A momentâs peace, felt, yet best defined
less by whatâs there, than by whatâs left behind.
Hi Horus,
Yes 10, its called Iambic pentametre, five iambic steps so that you walk through the rhythm of the lines da dum all the way. The rhyme scheme makes this an English or Shakespearean sonnet Rainstorm over Angelos cafe which I will post in a minute has a different rhyme scheme and is an Italian or Petrachian sonnet
OK I see what you are saying, but perhaps lives, in a sentence structured like that it should be began, the was keeps the tenses correct and allows me to use begun.
loved it