bondjedi
on Final Comment by dougsoderstrom
28 May 2003, 12:47 AM
That's it, blame the critics for your own failings. This screed sounds like Richard Nixon in '62 when he lost the Governor's race. "You won't have Dougie Soderstrom to kick around anymore!" Like Nixon, you too I fear shall return.
Good Good Good Good Perfect. Working hard.
I am sorry to say this but It looks like you are just plain pathetic. It is short and that is good. but You have no heart
Well, you're definitely a right hand drive, that's for sure. That is no advertisement. That was well engineered art. period.
Ask that troop how are they gonna top themselves? Thanks for the sock in the gut blasting me backwards into a reality check!!!! I still got an appointment though. gotta start someplace.
Not bad imagery here. I like it.
The LSD trip at the beginning was interesting but the second part of the poem was much more poetic.
I wouldn't go throughing things in the trash bin, the idea of defining yourself in a poem is OK, just work on it, some poems take a lot of reshaping you just have to keep at them.
Ahhh Thanks.
Ahhh thanks.
I have and here it is tweaked, I hope.
In Paraguay the peon raises,
in parallel his palms and praises,
the paramour that gives him light,
the paradigm that shifts his sight,
parading dream-like parenthesia
through parasoltic paramnesia.
The paranormal paralyses ---
saner souls live through disguises.
A fact storm in an empty mind;
and logorrhea saves the blind
informivorish parasites
devouring life in mega bites.
Did paratroopers paragliding
park your thinking in a siding,
for paralytic wills partaking,
of the fantasies theyâre making?
Apparently, reports a journal,
such apparitions are quite normal.
Within the mind where parallax is
there often follows parataxis.
Then paraphrasing parakeets
pronounce in parabolic tweets
like paragons gone paranoid
some parashah you must avoid.
A paraclete that lives in locks
might help you find, among these rocks,
some paradise in paradox;
some freedom from the ticking clocks,
and for your future, in a box,
some trousers and a pair of socks.
"And for that one day that will be together" we'll
The pepsi challenge beats tab in the polls.
is bahookie polynesian for shit
Likable enough.
Jeremi B. Handrinos
replying on I am an genius, and you're a stupid turd by Shardik
27 May 2003, 7:49 PM
No, just testing my new nucleur fly swatter. Even if you miss one on the table the sonic slap of it kills all of the windowed ones in that room, spectacular que no?
Wow, you sound like a senile old English professor. Yet in your other posts you have the rantings of a hormone imbalanced porn king wanna-be with an inferiority complex. To answer you're response, I say your love is false. Using plastic posies as a symbol of love would be as using a woman's breasts to symbolize sex. As for my writings, I do not intend to be as good or better than any other writer, I merely convey my feelings in a way presentable to others. So I will continue to use the rose as my symbol of love and passion, and you can skip my writings if so you wish.
Yes Roses are out dated but nowhere other than the title does it actually say rose. I think Its a little harash to say that they'll Never write that well Bachus, I mean hey who knows? I give this a -7- cause its not bad but is a bit cliche(no offense), even tho you did the cliche well, I'm afraid I've seen better.
well pink...i also see room for improvement. Got a little carried away on this one...perhaps it should go to the trash bin
pink...I need to do some re-editing...at the time I wrote it, it made sense...now...i'm not so sure. I think I possibly got a little overcome with emotion...perhaps this one should go to the trash bin huh?