thepinkbunnyofdoom
on I Am(Defined) by lil cindy lu who
27 May 2003, 5:58 PM
Meh, I have a hard time relating each stanza to the others execept 1 and 4. -6- But only cause I see room for improvement.
Truely Worthy of Being dedicated to our Fine Feathered Friend. -10-
Did you get the inspiration for this from Chris de Burgh?
Dark_Angel you belie you moniker. I like this, but the middle line lacks movement which single words
convey......but this is a minor point. Great stuff.
haha, no
Obi Wan has taught you well.
Join the dark side (ooooopppppaaaar)
Your still my muse this is so rich in detail
Wonderful !
A myriad of images which you have condensed more so than the others. This reminds me of a Frost poem I read
Kassanna, regardless what anyone says, I think this is a beautiful heartfelt poem and the rhythym is very nice.
We have all had our gardners
I like the last line in the second verse, very true. Anyway...not bad, there are some lines that could be redone but all in all, nice job. (9)
Deserving so much more, but it'll have to do. -10-
LOL, humorish. -9-
Amazingly well done.
thepinkbunnyofdoom
on Time flies (or why i never have time on my hands) by blurryphotograph
27 May 2003, 1:19 PM
Quite Poetic, Similar to One of D.A.'s recent poems, but yours is actually a poem. -10-
ahh Pink...what can I say...I led a sheltered life in that convent hehehe.
Well written and Enjoyed very much. -10-
roses may be outdated...but they still bare a prick
-10-
lol Baba....did you sweep them under a rug with your magic broom?
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