-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Water Runs Deep by shwenatjadeflower
22 May 2003, 11:12 AM
You lie in bed night after night, wishing people would understand you and your beautiful world, don't you?. God, just shut up. You make me sick.
Well, a lot of people think of me as just a one-dimensional poet who only writes about shallow themes like feces and homelessness. But if you think about it, those are themes that can be very relevant to modern life if portrayed in a mature and responsible way. It's only the people who stop at the surface of my poetry that tend to become angry and confused, when if they'd just open their hearts, they just might find I have some important things to say.
It is indeed sad that we've become so materialistic over the past few years. I remember a time when people cared about core values and simpler truths, but with the advent of violence in the media, and toys made of plastics instead of traditional woods, I truly we feel have lost something important and innocent from the fabric of daily society. Jesu be with you.
Really beautiful-nice one 8
Ok, it's a little to cliqued in parts but i like the part about the ping pong ball guided by the paddle and hand.I know what you mean by the sentiment of the poem. A world where everyones waters ran deep would indeed be a truly marvellous place. But at least there are some and not none at all!
Nice use of the word "slagheap". Reminds me of a pile of discarded women at the end of an orgy.