thepinkbunnyofdoom
replying on Looking Down by thepinkbunnyofdoom
12 Apr 2003, 7:56 AM
Well it is a little cryptic but its actually just about staring at the sun.
I'm not sure. If I watched it, Its been awhile since I've seen it. I only write in spurts so don't be too alarmed. Pretty soon I'll unable to write anything for months. Right now I write about 2 poems for every 3 days and I post about three aweek.
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" Here is a bunny. Not very cute but I call him Jason(thepinkfluffybunnyrabbitofdoom) just like me.
in-ter-est-ing.
Ooooh thats good. Not a ten because i will give nothing a ten after reading that poem by DA about the sausage roll - brilliant! i will instead give a -9- x
Bit strange! Doesnt completly make sense (to me anyway)
well obviously its a UK thing then - most people have it over here! You must be writing/posting about one poem a day - i cant keep up! i will look at them now. Have you seen Strictly Ballroom? Great film im listening to the album -not my usual taste but very good - it was the only one in the store! here is a Kat. (spelt with a K coz thats my name) X
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O O it looks a bit worried!
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yeah that did piss me off i dont see whats wrong with this site, cept the swear words, bobjim, gay porn, lesbian porn, raping poems....
Oh and 8 . The start has great metaphors, then changes a little to telling later. thats all.
I'm beliver in voting because as a writer improves, he/she can watch the avg. of the poems climb, which gives a basis for improvement. in my opinion.
Mght I ask of your time on my "mum". Seems I scared people with it, it is untouched.
Thank you,
Your friend, Rich
Here Here!!!!
Very nice
The Harvard Lampoon would be proud, you've read 'Bored of the Rings' I suppose?
Thank you so much for your comments I perused them with interest. I agree about s1 line 2, and the blasted spellcheck does not suffice with German Aviation.
The river waiting for a mudslide is suggesting that my purity is waiting for the filth that I associate with affection. Once the mudslide occurs I am in a sense purified, normal, at peace with giving myself emotionally and physically. As soon as these emotion emerge again I will take light of your constructive suggestions and re-edit. For now farewell all.
This is now a song in the illtunes section of gangbox.com enjoy. song 80.
/mp3/The Crutchling.mp3
Ignite this.
Fine Fine Weed That You Smoke -9-
Excellent on so many levels. 10 in my eyes.
I wouldn't say that just not well
I read this and You just seem to be repeating your other works. No new thought, no New way of expressing the same thought.
I think this sounds alot like some of your other work but still very touching