-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
11 Mar 2003, 4:05 AM
Dear lastobelus,
Speaking as someone who has had a formal education in poetry, I'd like to take this opportunity to point out the utter wrongness of your wrong opinions: Your wrong opinions are utterly wrong. The purpose of poetry is to deal with issues. Just read "Unwanted Gift" (http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.
Idiots are far worse then the smug ones. So are people who use caps lock. Then again I think those are covered in the category of idiots. A smug idiot maybe the worst of them all.
I don't really like Wendy's answer. I also don't like that they know they're characters in a book. Maybe if you made is something that actually worked with the way the story goes (He escapes for a while but then gets pulled back in a la Hook) Wendy's answer would be better. Just having her tell him that he can't change things doesn't work for me.
By the way "trap" in the 4th line from the end should be "trapped"
Oh how lovely a response from the Lord.
Ahh.. someone gave you the classic "I'm a dick so I'll vote 0 with no reasoning." vote. I liked it though. Sad but determined not to be. Fatalism without resignation. 6.
I refuse to vote on any of your poems until you tell me what Z looks like naked playing the fiddle. Write a poem about that!
Great use of cheese ball rhyme. This is like a techno pimple poem! Why are you lablank ! !! and !!!? Did you really think we need to read all of these fantastic poems at once and could not wait a week for more? Oh baby, give me more. I want Leblank IV.
Really, are you serious or just a misguided four-year-old who has access to mommy's computer for 15 minutes a day?
Oh lynn, give me that fucking blankey before I go nuts on you. I am super tough you know. hahahahahah.
hahahahahahaha. A 4. This is sap. I.e. pooh. Send it to a legit pub and let them laugh at you!! Ooooooh. I am so close to this poem and you suck lost in America. hahahahahahahaha. what a doof.
Another in the long line of "I am misunderstood, really this is genius" crap you write. Dude, Stan Rice is dead. It is yours for the taking!!!!!!!!
Some good, some bad. Think about the metaphor you are trying to create and the expound on it. It is not as if it is an easy thing to do. If you want to be a good writer, you have to pour over your work.to make sure everything is connected. Make sure it all makes sense. Just ask DA.
Big words, decent flow, fine images, but the poem feels a bit forced. Like a generic observation. But, I am drunk so don't mind me.
A poor attempt at imitating Dark Angel while still sounding like the goof of a poet cadacus! Crap all around!
You really do not have a clue as to what you are trying to say, do you?
The first line ruined everything!
Seas of blood is goofy. The incessant repetition is goofy. The reference to Bob Marley is goofy. Why are you leblank #3. That is goofy!
I see after a month and a half you still write like shit! Such originality in writing that way though! Good job, dickhead!
Profound!! Genius!! Sure it is. Look up the haiku!!
Naturally, the common people don't want war ... but after all it is the leaders of a country who determine the policy, and it is always a simple matter to drag the people along, whether it is a democracy, or a fascist dictatorship, or a parliament, or a communist dictatorship. Voice or no voice, the people can always be brought to the bidding of the leaders. That is easy. All you have to do is to tell them they are being attacked, and denounce the pacifists for lack of patriotism and exposing the country to danger. It works the same in every country.