Jeremi B. Handrinos
replying on Floating in mindless clutter of words by wLeBlancw
9 Mar 2003, 7:29 PM
Yes, I know. 7.5? That aint bad. And i'm gay with 301.8 poems (the .8 of the poem i am still writing on my girlfriend's evil left breast, she looks like a pair of vans tennis shoes worn by sophia loren going out my garage window with an aborted fetus duct taped to your poetry collection fashioned into an ass-hat on her ass) Brandon, why didn't you tell me you were an eight? and a top of the pile model? i never modeled, not cute enough being only a 7.5, but hung like a fire ant, I'm an composer, actor, poet type, my work requires skill(tuning the instruments signing autographs, ordering room service etc. you know how it is, hows milan?) We could of avoided all of this american idoltry and propaganda if you would of confessed these new highly tangible facts earlier, perhaps i could bring your girlfriend's shoes over (in the shape of my girlfriend naturally), and we could all fuck eachother stupid on the cat walk? Whatta say, stupid, or what!?lolaymf.yy.
Shardik,
Gangbox.com is a terrible site, please invest in a web designer. You're a 7.5 on a scale from 1-10. And no, you lose because you see I am a top male model and I am an 8 on a scale from 1-10 so booohooo. What's next cool guy? You are going to tell me that your wife is Pam Anderson? Please. I win on that one too. My girlfriend looks exactly like Sophia Loren. I have also written over 300 poems so I am a better poet than you. I scanned your work today, Shardik and wasn't impressed. You lose again. You feel love all around you and yet you are extremely angry. Why? Is it an empty feeling inside that makes you stay up all night? You're very rude, angry, unkind and frankly quite annoying.
Actually, I wrote this thinking he sounded like Settle, looks like Settle, smells like Settle, but alas, apparently isn't. Which almost makes the entire day even more worthwhile somehow. (See, Settle and me got a thing, we are battling one another at the expense of the innocent, lovely huh?)
Leo
Horoscope (by Astrocenter.com)
A selfish attitude on your part will not be tolerated today, regardless of the circumstances, dear Leo.
Don't make it worse for yourself by pretending that you don't notice the hurt feelings of those around
you. People are likely to be extra sensitive today, so be careful of trying to impose your will on
someone who really just wants nothing more than an ear to talk to and a shoulder to cry on.
Whoops, so much for that.lol.
"rough dewed welcome of time" tastes as good as the first fucking cup of coffee in the morning.
The meter 'n' rhyme slips away as you go deeper into the drunk.
duh.
fast and good.
You aren't!
The reason we feel driven to posture is an instinctive drive to impress females.
If you're going to beat your chest, do it somewhere and in such a way that it actually has a chance of catching the eye of a hapless female.
I believe is what he was saying.
Wow, very interesting comments I'll take into consideration whilst revising this. Thanks, z.
And yes, it should be "snatches" for sure.
ciao, bella.
Sir, superman is not fat. www.gangbox.com
I have abs of steel and finely crafted hair, and am good at generally, everything.thanks again. nice try. I once shot a mooseknuckle in the Yukon. I served it with a luke warm chiante Brandon. Also; I am surrounded by love, it is you that feels guilty, not i friend, it was your poem.lol. I have a healthy son, and no guilt. LOOK OUT BEHIND YOU! GOOD GOD THE MEWLING OF AN ANgRY FETUS! please. "Do as thou wilt is the whole of the law" Alister Crowely, Rush who? I'm an anarchist idiot not a fucking television personality, but if this was a debate... My friend you lost back at the angry fetus, unless of course you are John Carpenter and designing a new film called 'they're angry, tiny, and slippery' "Bitter Fetus III, the crawl back".
nifty.
Revise if you want, but be careful where you take revising advice from.
'couse, you could always take it from me: how 'bout "and rubs his emptied hands"
my beef is that I get the impression you want to celebrate some aspect of your old man, but you caricature (is caricature allowed to be a verb, or do I have to -ize it?) him too strongly for the celebration to have impact. If you follow what I mean.
hello mr bub,
some comments on yer pome:
"surreptitiously. "
too long/bland/erudite a word for this poem. it doesn't fit the gist of it. you're all about the things the simple and the simply arrogant want hhere--and besides, they are obvious in their avoidance, are they not? so why the word, bub? it confuses the issue.
"prideful gnarled knuckles at the line-walkers
passing above*,*
snatch*es* the black woolen cap
from his lap. "
i know you're all about the grammar, so i thought i'd throw that at you.
that being said, i like this very much.
but your ending makes him a plant and not a man; by steailing his mobility, you steal his humanity. if by 'barrel' you mean to infer his thirst for the 80 proof, it does not work here..
ta,
z
isn't sacharine supposed to come with a warning label? Oh. "A Best Friend". It did. My bad.
You are an excellent poet!
i take a brief sabbatical to attend to business, and this is how you repay me? you may have fooled ol' darcus--i know you have mucus to spare, right alongside all those lovely canned tetes i gave you for yer berthday last summer--wheelie d is just jealous because i spurned him one too many times, and now i see you chasing this little tightie? for shame, speedy d! for shame.
xo, z
No, pardon me Shardik. I feel really sorry for you. It's apparent that you never felt loved in your life and that you are very angry because of it. It is okay. Killing multiple fetuses is not going to solve your problems neither is yelling at some guy on a forum. Since you're so concerned about humanity, what exactly are you doing to help? Nothing. You just sit at home and bitch. You are a fat and lazy American who just blabbers. Go to a different forum. I'm not here to hear Rush Limbaugh. Thanks.
Thanks.
I'm still trying to figure out how to work in "nick-knack paddywhack" and "this old man came rolling home". :-)
wha? All I see is (private/not displayed).