TanHand
replying on Raw boy chiva by horus8
7 Feb 2003, 2:07 PM
you know I meant |\| | |/| right
I was talking about the last two lines.
check it out now... i fixed it.
a bit niney for my taste.
thank you
please explain, i would like to make it better
God you really were my understudy weren't you. The single word final line thing is a bit tired, don't you think? Visually this is quite good, it straddles the line between normal line breaks and image. Try to make the words more interesting. 6.
The reason I call you a knockoff is because you're full of fire and passion and such. They day you laugh at yourself harder than anyone else can is the day I stop goading you.
If ever there was a time to say "fuck you"...
RGallet is the poetry world's newest newly discovered genius.
Chirpe.
lol spiders
Check your first line.
the rest is complimentable.
is this about drugs lol
I liked you better as a cheap Settle knockoff.
wow this is BRILLIANT! Also extra points for not mentioning me! surely this means i am producing quality work?!
Go back and watch Hamburgher hill. It will help. Also casualties of war.
"I'm no more than a toy" I'm no more than your toy. This is a lyric, also, by the way. 8.
Not long ago, I was batheing in a lake. I was nude. Then I was hit in the face with a flat stone. The dangerously stupid girl who threw the stone said she was "just skimming". Fortunately, I am fully trained in the Art of Facial Reppellence and was able to absorb the projectile on its third bounce using my Emergency Combat Glands. Next time, I might not be so lucky. So if you ever decide to spend your evenings "skimming" again, please make sure you are accompanied by a responsible adult and that you only use pretend stones or stones made out of cream cheese and/or chives. Good day.