minuteswithu
on lost love by cherish
10 Jan 2003, 1:55 PM
Excellent work. 10.
I'm afraid you don't get it, hatters hare. Consider the following sentence:
"The parson's nose the pirate procured ate some honey."
Clearly, it is grammatically correct. Another way of putting it would be "The parson's nose, that was procured by the pirate, ate some honey".
Now consider
"The shoehorn the parson's nose the pirate procured lubricated glistened."
Another way of putting this would be "The shoehorn (that was lubricated by the parson's nose (which the pirate procured)) glistened."
So, a pirate procured a parson's nose, which in turn lubricated an shoehorn, which in turn glistened. Do you see?
Bachus
on OK, I apologize - it's steaming shite and no mistake, but it was the best I could come up with on the spur of the moment. I'm off to slit my wrists now, since writer's block has sent me spiralling into the depths of the deepest depression in human history... by Yardbird
10 Jan 2003, 1:22 PM
that was like the incredible journey, but even more credible.???
vintage, cutting edge. the future has arrived. bastard.i
I HAVE NEVER FUCKING LAUGHED THIS HARD! "BACHIANSWAGGER AWARD for brilliant use of everything. 10!H
the wolf needs a pika in it's mouth...too funny. nice one.
This is really good. I agree with Vulcan re: the third stanza--it really is the best--the images are great. Could you somehow sustain the imagery throughout? S2--"crumbling foundation" really is a cliche--might want to work something else in there.
way to go. Many ppl dislike dark angel. I don't know what their problem is. Keep an open mind though.
and please. Check out my writings. I hope you enjoy them.
you know what we need to have a petition about dark angel. Have everyone that hates them give it a 10 and put their reason for hating them. It can be called "Ode to the Infamous Angel"
You sure I'm a baffoon? Not a bassoon or a buffoon? A buffet maybe? No--a bouquet!
Sorry to disillusion you JoyfulySlotterdKitty, but I gave you a two because your poem was juvenile, trite, and completely uninteresting both in content and execution. Nowhere did I "jest at your longing"--I did poke fun at a couple of the comments on it, but so? Get over it.
Actually, I would be happy if you did read more of mine. In posting on this forum, we all wish for more readers. I was
kind of kidding as I still do the opposite of what I said a
poet should not do. But, not as often as I used to:)
Look here dingbat.....I think I have talent. Yet you gave me a two. Will you enjoy it when I jest at your longing? Ney I shall not sink to the level of a lowely and talentless baffoon. Therefore I shall rate your work accordingly. Pride is every one's down fall eventually. Be ware of your own words for some day they may anger some one.
no but that's very close
piss?
God I love mozilla
lol whats a nutt ree?
Fucking newbies. 10.
I SALUTE U SIR
smiths rawk dewd lol asl?
A new genus of genius