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replying on UltraSound by UnityMitford
19 Dec 2002, 11:46 AM
easy killer. once again let me 'reiterfy' ha ha (i love mispronouncing shit) holidAYS + nomoney+ miscarriage= heavy on the sauce with a towed vehicle ala-mode..in other words i was in venice beach rrying to figure out where i put my truck, why they moved it (bastards) and where they moved it too. also. i am not pretty, and there is no pool. there's an ocean 15 minutes away.
things happen what can you do? it's fine...she's fine..these things are out of my control, so i just kind of watch it all happen. like when i was a kid and we would go to this chinese restaurant and i would just stare at the fish tank. wondering. wich is wich.
that sucks,h. i did not understand your comment. so sorry for the loss. i know you were so happy about the baby.
No fuck you, pretty boy. If you bothered to make some sense this would never happen. I am just trying to keep the karma balance. And where were you yesterday. I stopped by the address you gave me and no one was home. You pay four car payments to live there, wow. Where was the pool? I told Romer to keep an eye out for you and the boy. You know "No Child Left Behind."
i wasn't kidding, nor was i trying to be funny. there was a miscarriage, because she was on that shot thing which does something (weaken the lining of the uterus? and the embryo doesn't fasten slides down becomes tubal hemorrages blood, emergency care..vacuuming..half smile guilt no conversation on the way home. SO DON'T FUVCKING TELL ME WHJAT. I MADE A FUCKING COMMENT ABOUT A PIUUECE THAT REMINDED ME OF A SITUATION i went through LASt week called a miscarriage i put it down just because i'm like that. get it it made me think of thast i put it down..i don't need to play fucking mind games with people to get off..get that? i wasn't trying to be fucking funny, so go fuck yourself.
March is Colorado's snowiest month. So it is good you took this to CT and made it your own rather than leave it out here in the BenRice haiku. It is a desert out here. We need more vocabulary for the many shades of brown. If it were not for the immense blue sky, white-capped mountains and non-native evergreen we would all perish and be blinded to whiteness out here. Very nice in your country.
do you think if i blow-gunned anna nicole smith while she was holding court to her fucking lawyer and interior designer i could kill them all..i mean..you know with the right wind and timimg?
well...if anything..this poem helped me appreciate my coffe a bit more. take a three, and go back to your fucking hobbit riddles. you're about as marvelis as 90210 re-runs hith a midget riding around a saddled bull mastiff naked with a tin foil hat and cap gun. galavanting around my house while a constantly hit rewind play rewind play tookie hat play smookie hey! PLAY BOMBAY! hey! hey hat! HAY! HAY! HAY! fuck.. broke a nail. shit.
distasters? the last time i provoked one of those it chased me down the street with a whiffle ball bat, and it was like "ookey wooki chueki chew..chewy chick chick wa wicky chew." and you know what i did? i happily wept and ran for my life. tsk. and please don't smash the cloud. thanks.
fomented? formented. and you guys call me paranoid. tsk.
the shaft of his gun? Are you fucking high? "to the kids that have past through the walls of my virginity"? hahah the flood that kicked us down...its like hallmark on bad acid naked and duct taped to the new humvee with seth green and his posse driving you around while the backstreet boys make sweet love to the back of your backwards baseball cap. you should be rubber banded to death. patti smith should give you a left handed wedgie.
Please, do us all a favor and shut up.
unfortunately. miscariage.
"glorious red umbrella"--nice. I like this a lot--you've managed to be wistful without falling into sticky sentimentality.
I dont always vote on the whole poem and this one by you is a classic example why.
Stanza 1 nothing wrong with it.
its a bit generalistic and wishy washy from there.
However I wrote a whole poem last week around 2 lines i wrote from a poem 10 years ago, it was well received on here so just remember all the poetry you write is good because you write it, the key is finding the path to peoples empathy and originating a unique style that people buy. Anyway happy holiday hobojo, 0 votes fly around on this site like tears in a pram its not bad ---5
'Maimed' for the perfectionist in you. this strong piece should not be weakened by spelling errors now bend over boy !
WHATTTEEEEEEESH !
the 1st 4 lines stanza 2 are awesome. 7-
yap, that is what I meant, but the other way does sound a little more sturdy.
You have many a string to your bow, and this split the arrow,
bring The hooded man the maid
(applause from the sherriff and nottinghams peasants)