deadstar
replying on The Gunfighter by deadstar
28 Nov 2002, 4:47 AM
eh FF?
Well thanks for your comments
Thankyou
looks like a bascinet to me, wheres his mighty weapon
Nice one.
Genius, and there was me thinking elephants had knees all along
Am I missing something? My initial reaction upon reading this was one of disbelief of how this has so many 10s, despite the poignance of the last line.Is there some deep metaphor here,and if so PLEASE could someone explain it for the benefit of us peasants.
Or have I just made a complete twat of myself?5 for confusing me
Oh come on!You mean to tell me that a witless piece of crap like this can get to number 1, and something with the sheer genius of cleverdevice's 'A Limerick by me' can't even scrape the top 15 before it's mercilessly ripped to pieces by 'proper' poets???"!!This really is an insult.Although I am quite glad a stupid poem can get in the top 15, as it gives hope to the rest of us.5
yes
Raggy!
Try coming from a different angle when writing of love, love is indefinable, everyone has different defintions, delve deep whats yours? let me taste from your creative cauldron
mmmm shenanigans in the sack, great for thursday mornings, scrap that - any morning
so/so it needs identifying as a poem or lyric, try it as a lyric and wrench the heart more, as it stands its mediocre, could be good though, play with it (the poem) that is
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I was reading this doing the voices and realize I must be losing it ! like your style, just to be petty this aint no haiku but heres an 7 to get fat on with your scoobie snack.
horus8
replying on Some place west of here, or the big blah blah. both apply by horus8
28 Nov 2002, 1:23 AM
do you really want so much for me to take the time out of my creative schedule.. to what? dance the tango with someone who can't even square dance..here's some advice.go play with dark angel..see..he knows how to write letter perfect limmericks that posess staying power, not playground cherry drops..that could damage the integrity of your future pen movements..see unlike you..i give credit when credit is due, but your limmerick was wastefull..you took no time..you went for my throat by disrespecting my family, because you thought it would teach me a thing or too about what? my flippiant demeanor? it's called an imagination..most writers have it in spades..which allows them to create characters and situations that go against the moral sinew of society..and at the same time go about their normal lifes...having just raped a girl and kidnapped a child in story, but than put that piece of writing down to sit and eat with a grandmother, or a child for a normal dinner and not start feeling the content out loud or verbally spewing it in the innocents direction..my son and his mother have nothing to do with my crafts here or in the "studio"..i don't care if you make up fictitional characters to bash me with (like i did with uncle phil) but to do what you did was uncalled for, pathetic, and ironically it shows the above average reader that it is actually you who should never have children...because already you have no respect for them or yourself...nor can you seperate the layers between having a good time creatively, with writing, in all good fun..as compared to allowing your sensitive underdeveloped ego to guide your insensitive underdeveloped mind..better luck next time. i truly am sorry for you, but not really..keep up the good work.
too late..i'm finger less already, and yes, your right. i riffed all that with my own swollen member in my mouth...just take that as a vague reminder of what i'm capable of doing when i'm not blowing myself......you lasses don't have the finger speed, nor the spontaneous passion to even begin to defend yourselfs, and i would look like a moron indeed if i kept revealing to the good public here just how onesided this all must look...i feel like i've just fucked a couple of uniformed school girls in my vw bus, so i'll just let you kids off here..have nice walk home..no thanks is neccesary. the pleasure was undoubtedly all mine..