razorgrin
on IM PISSEEDDDDDDDD by little_angel_maria
28 Nov 2002, 11:39 AM
The purpose of this site is to submit your poetry to be critiqued and voted upon. it's not a support group for whiny brats who don't have any real problems. If she writes a piece of utter shite, then she'll get the votes and comments that go along with it. if she wants group hugs, she may take her shit elsewhere.
Ah, leave her the fuck alone you callous basterds. If you haven't got anything nice to say SHUT THE FUCK UP!
cheesy but harmless i guess
that second paragraph may upset a lot of people, although it could get ignored, who knows. I think birthmark may well wade in he's an anglophobe don't ye know
My mum wants to know what your doing tonight?
She then wants to papercut you to death with a copy of this, (if she can get up off her fat ass that is)
America gave us Baywatch !
It also gave us David Hasselhoff !
America gave us Star Trek
America gave us a fascinting insight on how to bury a cigar,
America gave us Cowboys
America gave us Hawaii five o and Magnum.
Thank God almighty real or not for giving us a big fuckoff ocean to seperate us,
hey guys who fucking cares theirs only 1 American I gotta problem with and he thinks Macedonias a fucking dance at a wedding.
rest, deep breath, Think of John Lennon, and congratulate each other on breaking the 'Guiness book of records' for the most comments on any poetry website ( hey if thats true melinda 50/50s fair huh?
Kind of 'supermarket poetry' with the wrong price tag on it
or to spoil through clumsiness and ineptitude
or a scottish way to say home
or part of a harness
piefed
I believe its ham with a typo, an extra e, tossnose.
In reference to line 4, what is hame?
Hopefully this is based on the classic cartoon rather than the film, which incidentally I haven't seen yet, but I have heard is crap.
I revise that previous statement:how can a elaphant crouch and walk with NO knees.
No, as much as I hate to say it, DA has a valid point here. The elephant in question is clearly crouching, which would imply it has knees. And the function of knees is not only to help up jump, but to crouch.And walk. So how can an elephant crouch and walk when it has knees?It's legs have to bend don't they?
This is a pile of poo.That's all I have to say on the matter I'm afraid.
The elephant is crouching by bending its knees, which are high up the leg because of the hoof-like feet of the elephant. No knees are visible, and I only said they cannot jump. Did I say anything about them not crouching? Pay attention next time.
What the hell is going on here, then:
http://www.zootorah.com/ZooRabbi/gallery
The best thing about this 'limerick' is that the third and fourth lines are longer than the first, second and last lines.