hobojo
on The Breathing Dead by Caducus
18 Nov 2002, 12:33 PM
What do you mean by a "salt pillow"?
What must one feel?
I understand that
Yuo are discribing every ding-dong on this site. Including me, though I am feminine and old. Of course we do have one or two Phd.s hanging about, but they are expert in ideas and words. Hah. As if that where something worthwhile. They can't fill a cavity or a prescription. They can come at you with words,and words and even more words. No cure. Quite the contrary, they breed schizophrenia in this weak culture of ours. Subversives. Spending untold thousands just to toss around the acedemic ball. You're friend has promised nothing, and owes nothing. It's 'too' not 'to' in line 7. Your poem smacks of judgement, and righteuos indignation, Pee-you
Thisis so not about the beauty of a bird. Expand on the image or change the title. Show us why you picked that title. Is there some comparison you forgot to make. Also, you need question marks.
are you totally retarded, or just in need of a friend? either or, i believe they're now both totally irrelevant. it pains me to have to say this but you are no longer worth my votes or my time. farewell.
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on I'm a homicidal kind of guy (spoof of every 'down-home' song you've ever heard) by Yardbird
18 Nov 2002, 10:42 AM
throttling is fun and good for hangovers...and spain..well. a pleasent enough place for cranium lobs...nice song. 8.
"Cealous of my looks" (sic). That is one conceited line, generally poor.2.
Hey, we all need something a little light weight once in a while. Amusing, one for the kids .8.
that's swell, but i fucking hate wrestling, t.v dinners...and dreamers.6
you sure light (i mean like) street lights i was hooked from the first parenthesied part..than it got a bit mono for med...not that monos bad, but don't you ever get out of the dark of winter FUCK! you're breaking my guitar strings over here for christ sake what? do you need a post card or something? here borrow my pea coat. 7.
Simple words, simple scenario, simply nice. 8.
the aroma of your lynx? (possibly brilliant) and just when i needed you mouth..is pretty extravagent also...slut. 6.
You might not have known what an acrostic was ;), but you know how to write a great haiku .9.
call this hemoglobin blues, but replace every word blood with smegma...that is all. flush!
superb. 8.
stanzas three and four should have there last coma'd statements underneath...it looks lame extending out to the side that way..still a powerful sentiment. take this rabbit and find it a hat. 6.
i just queefed, while cleaning out my cat's ear with my four inch pinky nail.5.
Yes, most excellent I think. With or without perfection.
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