horus8
on My Friend? by Blade
14 Nov 2002, 12:29 PM
yep.this still is absolute crapola. what a waste of ho2. fag.
what the fuck ever. seriously in all actuality you are a total fucking tarpuffer lonedisco29and ahalf..obviously the loose bowels of an over weight turnip..even dark angel has more trajectory..well.. even anthony robbins has more class than this and that shite head is classless...sorry for fogging up your glasses, but come on... you are grasping at gophers on a dark highway in minnesota..let go man...just let go. here..a hug. 0. this isn't even a real poem it's a fucking advertisement aimed at something called jealousy...drink a diet shasta..i recommend...boysenberry.
I can't help it. Generally, when I see the word 'Crocodile' in a poem, I expect to be amused. You actually managed to use them well. Bravo.
No insulting McCain! He lived a bare hour's away from here and is one of the prides of the province, by Gad.
By the way, this isn't TO the chip. It's BY the chip. Change the title to 'The Unwanted Chip's Ode' or something like that.
Get rid of the last line. Please.
poetandknowit
replying on Prose poem written in 1 minute and 27 seconds while listening to Slim Cessna croon by poetandknowit
14 Nov 2002, 11:47 AM
It was intended to be a complete square, but it dragged all the way over the page. so I broke it up for poemranker. and you are right, it is horay. 1, 27 without a proof. If I proof, it may shoot to 1, 30. And of course yours are better. They take 10 minutes. Write one under a minute and see what you end up with, eh.
I'm doing my best not to be you. God spare me from that fate.
What do you feel on paper? Spores? Chip grease? Old semen?
'Eye pinch'? God that would hurt.
Tintagiles
replying on Prose poem written in 1 minute and 27 seconds while listening to Slim Cessna croon by poetandknowit
14 Nov 2002, 11:42 AM
I'm greatly honoured. I like mine better, though. Is that supposd to be 'hoary' in the first line? (And to be pedantic, it looks rather cut up into lines to be a prose poem.)
this was a fun ride.
i wish you could post a link to this, with the music. then i could vote on it. it needs to be sung.
poetandknowit
replying on Prose poem written in 1 minute and 27 seconds while listening to Slim Cessna croon by poetandknowit
14 Nov 2002, 9:24 AM
This is merely a tribute poem written in honor of your speed writing pal Tintagles. I actually clocked myself, which frightened me, I think.
This poem is somewhat stale. Ha ha, I'm funny. It made me smile so that's a good thing. it reminds if of how children feel sorry for inanimate objects. I used to sit on the wobbly chair at home because I knew no one else liked it and I didn't want it to fell left out. My son does the same thing with his toys, well he used to. He doesn't play with toys anymore(sigh). I think children would appreciate this effort.
There's a lot of wonderful language here I especially like "The derilict peace" that images I think is an important one, for me anyway. "Ensuring life and not existence" makes me say 'fuck'... but in a good way. Unfortunately my less favorite rhyme(love/above) is also found here. When ever I see the word above at the end of a line I know the word love is not far behind. Ha, I made a poe-m!
UnityMitford
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
14 Nov 2002, 8:54 AM
you know what i meant. don't make me squeeze my legs together to collect the drippings.
oh, lord.
if i were Dannara, i wouldn't know how the hell to take this (not that i do anyway).
damn you! you know i'm off the sauce! foul temptress!
(do you really mean frothy 'beer'?)
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A true mindfucker of a poem, i want to read it again after reflection and maybe re-vote, watch this space i may have questions.
wheres the paracetomol