on history by whispern_smoke_wisp
14 Mar 2005, 6:50 AM
The past. History is just a sample, not fate.
on a wonderful life by crooked_smile
14 Mar 2005, 6:53 AM
Verse 2 poses an interesting question.
on Deep Thought by Dreammaker1024
12 Mar 2005, 5:44 PM
Not really a poem.
on The Lonely Man by i_am_the_popsicle
12 Mar 2005, 5:46 PM
I rarely say this because it's a bum rule, but Show, don't Tell.
on The Because Collection by INTRANSIT
13 Mar 2005, 9:55 PM
Because you've gone bonkers or drunk.
on The Glass by dancin_n_da_moonlite
13 Mar 2005, 10:00 PM
And glasses keep the bugs outa your eyes while cycling. I've been told that in the past, which is the same as "I've been told that."
on Delusions Of A Peaceful Place by Stacy Stewart
14 Mar 2005, 6:47 AM
I can imagine it. Good title.
on On Reading by the_poetess
14 Mar 2005, 6:56 AM
Some good thoughts, but overwritten. How can you predict what you will never do?
on some deleted poem
15 Mar 2005, 12:43 PM
Yes, I believe it was, and about time too.
on Burnt by Dreammaker1024
15 Mar 2005, 1:04 PM
Delilah was needed to cut Sampson's hair. Judas was needed to betray Jesus. Two thieves needed to be crucified beside Him. So it seems.
Try spacing this out and defining the thoughts into verses, and then see if it really makes sense, or maybe a step toward something else.
Try spacing this out and defining the thoughts into verses, and then see if it really makes sense, or maybe a step toward something else.
on "America The Beautiful" by jroday
17 Mar 2005, 7:37 AM
According to tradition, it's the young who raise rabble and carry signs with four letter words and protest everything the establishment is doing. Unless you're younger than I think, we have here an exception, an atypical bandstaner, a non-stereotype. Rant on!
on Drinking before noon with Bukowski by Beyond_Dreams
17 Mar 2005, 1:03 PM
Youâve encountered the typical American man. Iâve been told on good authority that if you donât do it, they donât want you. Iâve met several who walked away for the same reason. But I have to confess that his hand slipping under my skirt to my knee, or a little past, aroused tender desires, mostly the kind that wanted to give a hug to a lonely man. And I still believe thatâs what heâd want if he could sort out his feelings. Thatâs why I donât give up.
on some deleted poem
17 Mar 2005, 1:07 PM
Not bad. Wordy in places, but not bad. One of your best.
on The Ususal Love Stuff by Dreammaker1024
17 Mar 2005, 1:12 PM
Strange how the usual love stuff is so unusual and new.
Just try to say it with a lot less words.
Just try to say it with a lot less words.
on Memory by chocolate9009
17 Mar 2005, 5:30 PM
I can see you ran into a wall without your saying so. And the spacing is just distracting. Other than that it's not bad.
on Camping, Volume 3 by jessicazee
18 Mar 2005, 1:53 PM
I've liked your camping missives. I have memories like them. How about "unknowing trees" and "blackberry briars whisper sharp stings before sweet fruit" and "ember light"
on To Show is Three by MacFrantic
18 Mar 2005, 1:57 PM
The answer to your opening question seems to be "Happiness is confined and it is lonely," but the words are tangled and it's hard to tell.
on some deleted poem
18 Mar 2005, 2:00 PM
Makes no sense. Of course a reflection is not worthy of love, as the person reflected is. So what.