replying on First by Dovina
15 Aug 2005, 2:10 PM
Never before have you zeroed me. Why?
on sculpture by ThePariahDog
12 Aug 2005, 7:25 PM
The first 4 lines are good, given the tight restraint you've chosen. The last 4 lines drift from the theme.
on Forever by my side by RGSsparky
12 Aug 2005, 7:23 PM
Good thoughts, but need better poetic expression.
on The cat who would fly by nentwined
12 Aug 2005, 7:15 PM
Do you mean "off my face"?
"a past that's not yet happened" the cycle, the simple thing.
It does seem that simple sometimes.
"a past that's not yet happened" the cycle, the simple thing.
It does seem that simple sometimes.
replying on My Prince by XOXScottishgrlXOX
9 Aug 2005, 11:37 AM
Nope. Wrong.
on My Prince by XOXScottishgrlXOX
9 Aug 2005, 7:52 AM
"two" "dark"
Would you love your Prince if you discover he had lied to you?
Would you love your Prince if you discover he had lied to you?
replying on More Than The World by XOXScottishgrlXOX
9 Aug 2005, 7:42 AM
Thanks for saying "even Dovina didn't catch it." Makes a person feel almost omnipotent.
replying on Never born. by | Broken |
9 Aug 2005, 7:39 AM
You can say those things, but you cannot prove them, just as CS Lewis cannot prove his statement. You are applying blunt logic to sensual things, and it comes out terse and without feeling. I'm not opposed to mixing logic and feelings, but I think you go too far in the logic direction.
on Dear Aunt Leonard by T. Jonathron Remp
8 Aug 2005, 2:09 PM
Silly
on Mirrored by MacFrantic
8 Aug 2005, 2:07 PM
Cute, but could be cuter.