Comments byDovina, 1241–1260 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Piano by Dovina 10 Mar 2006, 4:19 PM
lol, got to go.
replying on Piano by Dovina 10 Mar 2006, 4:09 PM
Another demand of said talk is to point out that both whales and crocodiles have that cute turn-up smile at their mouth corners, showing happiness, but for different reasons.
replying on Piano by Dovina 10 Mar 2006, 3:58 PM
Interesting you spell "prawne" the way DA does. Oh, I forgot, you're from whales, I mean Wales.
replying on I’m unsaid and dead by Prince of Void 10 Mar 2006, 3:54 PM
From Homer, Sisyphus was the wisest and most prudent of mortals because he rolled a stone up a hill only to watch it roll back down. But I think Homer was wrong because by that standard, the writing of poetry wiser and more prudent.
on I’m unsaid and dead by Prince of Void 10 Mar 2006, 3:36 PM
How uplifting this is! You cannot imagine how words like "I drop tears upon the last hope," tears of joy upon realizing hope's fulfillment. And "How less I effort to put the pain away," just shows the pain-relieving medicine of a happy soul. Yes, "All words are absurd" in such happiness.
on no title by mystic enoch 10 Mar 2006, 3:30 PM
Title: "Prince of Void"

The line, "Free me from the world that I linger in," has a prayer-like tone and a "that," neither of which seem appropriate
on The Tale of Hominus Ominus by Blue Magpie 10 Mar 2006, 3:26 PM
Very good. You built the case for Ominus needing Aggapus, but for the reverse to be true, as you say it is in the last verse, we need a strong example, as in the former. "no-one" could be no one.
replying on Piano by Dovina 10 Mar 2006, 3:10 PM
re: "using monster/monstrous - too much. The word gets deflated."
My hyperbole has slunk and lost its tension, like a hyperbola in limp conic section where once pricked the sharp point of a cone - is that what you mean?
replying on Piano by Dovina 10 Mar 2006, 3:04 PM
I wish you and Ranger would confer among yourselves and come up with a joint proposition. This tension between whale and crocodile has got to stop!
on the comet by pollywolly 9 Mar 2006, 1:37 PM
Does it really fly? is it a burning sphere? and it draws nearer or farer, I do believe.
on Stella 130 by BenRice 9 Mar 2006, 1:33 PM
A good-dog poem, but a bit wordy and cumbersome, i.e.:
"If coal is black" seems trite. Why not just "As coal . . .
"greyhounds that race" could drop the "that."
"long tail is wagged" Passive voice could be made active.
And If her name is stella, why not make it the last word?
replying on There by Dovina 9 Mar 2006, 11:17 AM
No, obviously my answer to your question is, "yes." He is full ob beans for believing that; and yes, the two things that you say are unrelated, are very related.
replying on There by Dovina 8 Mar 2006, 2:16 PM
Obviously, yes.
replying on There by Dovina 7 Mar 2006, 8:10 PM
I have abandoned some beliefs along the way, but none so needful of abdication as cursing the cartoon-making "dog" while denying the existance of the God Mohammed worshipped.
replying on There by Dovina 7 Mar 2006, 4:29 PM
Yes, I knew you would get there on your own, reject belief in atheism and at the same time assert Not-atheism.
replying on There by Dovina 7 Mar 2006, 4:15 PM
I decline the nomination
replying on There by Dovina 7 Mar 2006, 4:10 PM
Are you sure you want to go there in this already crowded space?
replying on There by Dovina 7 Mar 2006, 4:04 PM
What is this new title, "Queen of the Jews" Do you think I'm a Jew? Not in genetics or religion, how so, then?
replying on There by Dovina 7 Mar 2006, 3:50 PM
Then you weren't angry?
replying on There by Dovina 7 Mar 2006, 3:49 PM
I don't know God, and maybe I know God. I see no conflict here. It's like saying I don't know God, but maybe what I think about Him is actually knowing Him, in part, of course. It's a paradox and a pleasant way of thinking.