on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2002, 8:16 AM
oh my! I can almost feel the sheets stuck to my drenched thighs! yes!
on My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus
12 Sep 2002, 8:17 AM
Who's next?
on some deleted poem
12 Sep 2002, 7:54 AM
How are tears magic?
on she wonders, by <~>
13 Sep 2002, 8:48 AM
Dreamy, and painful--now that i've read the comments. Hang in there; lots of fish in the sea (I know you don't want to hear that, but give it some time, dear, give it some time.)
on some deleted poem
13 Sep 2002, 8:53 AM
I don't know how she could have known that the cars were going to crash beneath her open window. Isn't that waht you imply by saying 'stage'? Doesn't make sense to me. Explain please?
on Waking Up by PawnedTidal
13 Sep 2002, 8:54 AM
Anger management. In written form. Healthy choice, PT
on some deleted poem
12 Sep 2002, 8:12 AM
Am I being dense? Is 'the only option" the same as 'the final solution' in ww2?
on untitled#3 by darby pyn
12 Sep 2002, 8:15 AM
I have tried, but can make no sense of this. which would be fine, if it least entertained me. but it does not. how sad.
on Torn... by loneshadow29
12 Sep 2002, 7:59 AM
perhaps 'burdensome beast' would work better for you. a beast of burden is an ox, or the like, and i don't think you're writing about going around with farm animals strapped to your back. regardless, i hope that, by now, you have shed it.
on some deleted poem
12 Sep 2002, 8:02 AM
And certainly beyond the scope of this poem.
on some deleted poem
12 Sep 2002, 8:04 AM
Almost lovely and full of empty. are there up so many floating bells down in this meadow of yours?
on AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
12 Sep 2002, 8:10 AM
BRAVO!!!! WELL DONE, SIR! You are indeed a champion, and prove without a doubt that the keyboard is mightier than AIDS (but not mightier than Jesu, of course.)
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2002, 8:17 AM
You switch from plural to singular in the last stansza. you also don't need to include the parenthetical comment at the end. and why say 'life sucks'?
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2002, 8:20 AM
Your poem shows how well you can mimic. It is a good poem, it is a funny, but not necessarily accurate satire. I just don't get why you are so bitter towards god'swife. Jealous, maybe?
on some deleted poem
10 Sep 2002, 8:02 AM
Have you tried learning their alphabet? Daunting at first, you will recognize their patterns if you make the effort. You can teach an old dog new tricks.
on Putney at Low Tide by Christof
10 Sep 2002, 7:55 AM
Shouldn't it be "caonoe," (not period?) Do you need the periods?
on Not in front of the kids. by darby pyn
12 Sep 2002, 8:01 AM
Do you really want everyone to get stuck at the title? If not, I suggest you change it.