on Trying to say by persephone6358
8 Oct 2002, 12:36 PM
Dear gods. I cannot imagine why Hades would ever want to steal you away. I think I'll go warn him.
on one is leaving as i enter by Limness
8 Oct 2002, 12:12 PM
Because you're attracted to them. Admit it. You like it.
on Hearts End by grrund
3 Oct 2002, 11:04 AM
All right, I can see that you needed a rhyme for 'road', but 'toad' really is pushing it a bit, don't you think?
on When The Iron Curtain Came Down by RoseEyes
3 Oct 2002, 10:57 AM
Awww... baby raven...
on Spanish fLie by flatliner
3 Oct 2002, 10:56 AM
Not sure I like it that, but the first stanza's quite good.
on Funny Thought by phbiscuit
3 Oct 2002, 10:52 AM
This is 1)wonderful, 2)quite a realistic view of what goes through a dying person's mind. Bravo.
on The Dawn Of Darkness by Dariana
3 Oct 2002, 10:50 AM
I don't want to sound nasty, but I'm rooting for the stalker, myself.
on Suburbia in December by Nicholas Jones
3 Oct 2002, 10:41 AM
You could be something other than gloomy. Nights like that are beautiful.
Oh, wait, this is suburbia. All right, all you could be is gloomy. You're quite right.
Oh, wait, this is suburbia. All right, all you could be is gloomy. You're quite right.
on Confused by planetdicko
3 Oct 2002, 10:37 AM
Too many exclamations marks.
on All because of you by Artificial_Sweetner
25 Sep 2002, 9:54 PM
Why does your pain amuse us so much? Because it's so paltry, boring, cliched, misspelt and amusing. That's all,
Stacey dear, that's all.
Stacey dear, that's all.
replying on Hey! Shut up, and cut my grass. by horus8
25 Sep 2002, 9:50 PM
And didst thou define it for him?
on Anfal: Our 9/11 happened many times over by kawakurdi
25 Sep 2002, 9:21 PM
I have to agree that it drifts a little before the rolling off of the names, which is a stunning moment. What can I say, your long post talking about your village actually moved me more than most of the poem did. 'For, how many, which' was wonderful. And Poetandknowit, I must ask if you have read this poem in the original language, and if so if you understand that original language, before you go saying that's it's no good in that language.
replying on Hey! Shut up, and cut my grass. by horus8
25 Sep 2002, 9:00 PM
Dare one ask what you replied?
on Best Friends by Chels85
25 Sep 2002, 7:31 PM
Too many exclamation marks, among other things. Far too many. Especially since they're useless.
on The Sands Of Time by squall1leonheart
25 Sep 2002, 7:20 PM
I wouldn't mind the single line so much if you spelt well. Please tell me that 'houlisanating' wasn't just a typo, but supposed to mean something.
on glory bar realities by royalflesh
25 Sep 2002, 7:17 PM
The Jesus parts make it wonderful. Not so sure about the rest.