on The Prodigal Daughter by Dovina
15 May 2006, 4:49 PM
You could do with some punctuation.
on I'M by freakything
15 May 2006, 4:49 PM
awful.
on Room 34 Ashford Hospital by Caducus
15 May 2006, 4:48 PM
Very cunty funny.
on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina
15 May 2006, 4:45 PM
Not good. Parochial rubbish in fact.
on One Moment to the Other (v3) by nentwined
15 May 2006, 4:44 PM
pretentious.
on Old Friends by sliver
15 May 2006, 4:43 PM
A bit dull.
on Is Dying Ugly? by D. $ Fontera
15 May 2006, 4:39 PM
Not my taste, babe.
on With a pithy stroke by D. $ Fontera
15 May 2006, 4:38 PM
This is bollocks. Your others are better (I hope)
I have mixed feelings here. I loathe the Americanised spelling of meagre and sepulchre. And this alleged modernity clashed with the archaic and pseudo-poetic "ev'ry". And punctuation: if you eschew capitals I feel you could drop the commas and fullstops (or as you amusingly and coyly call them "periods").
on Ah! That Love Would'st Lead Me by EggbertShootsFire
15 May 2006, 8:37 AM
Line 6: "lead" should be "led". Apart from that error whivh I shall charitably assume is a typo, I liked this poem even though it's a bit derivative.
replying on George and Samson by Edna Sweetlove
15 May 2006, 3:26 AM
I enjoyed your reworked version (in spite of its occasional grammatical lapses). Thank you for reading! I shall shortly repay the compliment perhaps in kind! xxxx Edna
replying on A Prayer For God's Soldiers As They Kill For Him by Edna Sweetlove
15 May 2006, 3:22 AM
Dear Alchemy: my apologies. I am new here and I didn't realise the red X was a delete button! So the answer is YES up to now but NO not again.
on A Prayer For God's Soldiers As They Kill For Him by Edna Sweetlove
14 May 2006, 2:40 PM
Anal is next to godliness.
on youth in asia by suckmychucks
14 May 2006, 3:06 AM
Unfunny. Unclever. And it's not a limerick. Dreadful in short.
on My Barber Cut My Hair Too Long by D. $ Fontera
14 May 2006, 3:05 AM
Random thoughts from a creative mind. But not much good.
on Rock Bottom by dana071287
14 May 2006, 3:02 AM
Not excatly what you'd call either original or clever.
on The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
14 May 2006, 2:56 AM
OK I suppose. The final word of the last line of the penultimate stanza would be funnier if it were "bitches".
on Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone
14 May 2006, 2:55 AM
Too long and drawn out. I got bored by the 4th or 5th stanza. A couple of decent jokes in it though.
on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
14 May 2006, 2:53 AM
About as funny as 9/11. But less original.
on Im different so what? by xblackstarsx
14 May 2006, 2:52 AM
I assume this is intended to be illiterate childish rubbish in which case it succeeds. So 10/10 for beng worthless and puerile; 0/10 for anything else.