on rear end of the storm by malpaso
11 Jun 2007, 4:11 PM
Love the rain.
on Dixon Country Store, Kentucky by Dovina
11 Jun 2007, 3:57 PM
I like this especially the last stanza, it has quite a lazy feel to it, and I found it quite a matter-of-fact read. Like I guess they take whatever comes along as part of their life.
on The kissing chair incident by Stephen Robins
7 Jun 2007, 4:17 PM
Blackpool? Great little tale - true story?
Surely there has been a ban on those suits of shell for years!
I feel this wibbles and wobbles in places, could be tighter.
Surely there has been a ban on those suits of shell for years!
I feel this wibbles and wobbles in places, could be tighter.
on Cephalonia by Caducus
7 Jun 2007, 4:10 PM
For some hollywood reason I was wanting her to have been the one who killed him, for moaning about her bread. Is that what was meant or is the first stanza a little misleading? Or am I just being twisted?
on No-Strings by sca
7 Jun 2007, 4:02 PM
Some great lines - not sure about the third stanza, doesn't really speak of the rebel, just some things that sound kinda rebellious.
on Call Someone Right Away by jessicazee
7 Jun 2007, 3:44 PM
Pretty funny - darkly so, but a fair and just thankyou to your rescuer.
replying on The Equalizer by Skamper
7 Jun 2007, 3:35 PM
don't really know much about the quandries philosophers get themselves into, but your comment about god indicates you missed the point.
replying on Never Still by Skamper
5 Jun 2007, 2:43 PM
thanks you've been a huge help..I've changed a couple of things on my own copy
replying on Never Still by Skamper
5 Jun 2007, 2:37 PM
thanks your right its meant to be bear
replying on Never Still by Skamper
4 Jun 2007, 6:02 PM
that would be stumbling, and not finding regrowth appearing in a most unfortunate moment!
replying on Never Still by Skamper
4 Jun 2007, 5:58 PM
I hate stubling awkwardly over other's rhymes...will see what I can work out...thanx
replying on Love - In the Noughties by Skamper
4 Jun 2007, 5:24 PM
what can I say...was bored/lazy. In a strange way those tired ol' phrases kinda work...in the context of the write, yea? Or am I just reaching here?
on Alive at 95 by nypoet22
31 May 2007, 9:34 AM
first two stanzas set me up with a rhythm, and the last three tripped me up a little...
on The Story of Wolf and Moon by Blackshadow
31 May 2007, 9:27 AM
Love the story - but the spacing distracted me a little
on Sunset Beach by amanda_dcosta
31 May 2007, 9:22 AM
I do love to think in colour - but I can't get the image out of my head of seagulls with nice white teeth!
on Delicious Ann and the Magic Ham (Prose...I'm ashamed) by D. $ Fontera
31 May 2007, 9:12 AM
Don't know why I like this...
on Rolling Bells by MacFrantic
31 May 2007, 9:07 AM
molesting - dragging - torturing, and all things associated with the living...so visual here. Still not entirely sure this has clicked in its meaning with me, but I get lost in the movement within.
on Close your eyes but keep your mind wide open by darylchew
29 May 2007, 6:07 AM
(I'm sorry, that seat is taken.) great line - work back from there and shorten your sentences - pull it all in tight and the image will just pop...
on surgical spite by calliope
29 May 2007, 5:55 AM
I get the feel of emo - but the cuz in the last line doesn't fit with the rest of the write. You could lose it and keep with the darkness, it lightens the write too much - almost childish.