replying on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT
13 Mar 2004, 11:38 AM
MY GOD MAN! HAVE YOU FORGOTTEN KIRSCHNER? oops. Wrong room. sorry. Excellent point. It tickles the tympanum better this way also. I won't rewrite it though. It wouldn't feel like mine anymore. BTW, your Bretheren should sit next to "Instructions to a sculptor". Too bad the scoring has gotten such a bad rap.
replying on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT
13 Mar 2004, 7:42 AM
On a factual note, all three were together. The elderly couple looked like farmers. Sorry I can't be of more help than that. I was more focused on the one.
replying on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT
13 Mar 2004, 7:38 AM
Even though I snapped, I still took careful consideration of your comment , and I waited until the right image came to me. Thanks again.
replying on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT
6 Mar 2004, 1:15 PM
She is not a she anyway. She is a what. A thing for others to gawk at for the rest of their miserable little existences!!!
what the hell is taking god so long.?
what the hell is taking god so long.?
replying on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT
6 Mar 2004, 1:06 PM
I mean you are too good at poetry to waste your time or talents here. I hope this finds its way into the chipper where it belongs.(the poem) I am a "part time" poet. Do I need a black and yellow label? HEY ZZINNIA!! Make warning labels besides the wing things!!!!!
replying on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT
6 Mar 2004, 11:55 AM
I know that p/r is not a high wire act with an acrobatic sideshow for poets, so why are you here with us jugulars? jugglers.
replying on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT
6 Mar 2004, 8:56 AM
you said "anything at all". Should I have thrown a pineapple at her perhaps? No you did not offend me a while back. I think you write well and I get jealous sometimes. often. thanks for your input though.
on The Ultimate Survivor by Joe-joe
4 Mar 2004, 7:18 AM
You chose eddie for a subconcious reason. I saw a baby in the womb when I read this. (An) eddie being a swirling pool of water makes for an ideal name in this piece. Very good.
on At The Station by Christof
23 Jan 2004, 1:41 PM
Nice to see a fresh post from you!!!!!
on His Master's Jodhpurs by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
23 Jan 2004, 1:36 PM
of course.
on Sci-fi ode to poemranker nicknames by zodiac
23 Jan 2004, 1:21 PM
the harem smell of disinterest- perfect! Full load!
on EXIT (this way) by imperfect_creation
16 Jan 2004, 6:50 AM
You're finding your ears. Repeating the sounds of vowels is called assonance. Repeating the sounds of consonants is called alliteration. There's no problem with taking a rap-style approach to poetry, I would still recommend studying (proper) poetry. It will help you say what you are intending to. Like I recommend to many others, get a copy of: Poetry for dummies. I have one. It's easy to understand and a great basic tool.
on HALF by imperfect_creation
16 Jan 2004, 6:37 AM
the backwards letters are pointless. fix the spelling.
on A friendly conversation with a Native American by somemorepoetry
16 Jan 2004, 6:35 AM
Somehow I see the need for the length, yet feel it could lose alittle weight. I'm just not sure where.
You could Haiku the closer and eliminate the rest, saying the same thing. I do like it as is though.
You could Haiku the closer and eliminate the rest, saying the same thing. I do like it as is though.
on Skull Soup v.2 by SupremeDreamer
16 Jan 2004, 6:17 AM
Whatever you do, don't throw it out. There is a poem in there. put it on the "back burner" for a while.
on Chodeling on my knees by Shardik
15 Jan 2004, 1:15 PM
You're the only one I can tolerate this kind of stuff from. Poetry, that is. Is it? bivalve and arthroscopic made me peanut butter and jelly my keyboard.
Thanks for coming back.