Comments byINTRANSIT, 1101–1120 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on playing the scratching game by nentwined 15 Sep 2003, 4:56 PM
Lawd knows I knead the hep.
on sitting at the cliff's edge by nentwined 15 Sep 2003, 4:53 PM
Ok, I'm oversurplussed on city traffic. Trade ya for that cliff? Well done. Always good to hear from the Prime Minister.
lapel-grab-haymaker-followthrough. not pulled.

sadness+sadness=sadness
on missing time (revised) by Bill Z Bub 7 Sep 2003, 5:04 PM
I overworked my fish and his eskimo a while ago. It got so bad, I had to put them both down. Don't let it happen to you.
replying on When He's In Me by J.B. Manning 3 Sep 2003, 5:10 AM
You like making strange bedfellows, don't you.
replying on The empty room by INTRANSIT 3 Sep 2003, 4:58 AM
I can dig the comma. I wanted (hair) to rhyme with (there),I was trying a more subtle rhyme with this. I see what you're saying though. I'll play with it.

Oh looky! No more onesies-twosies! I must be gaining the respect of someone with pertinance. Ha! OW! damn that coffee's hot!
on Nightshades by Bachus 27 Aug 2003, 3:34 PM
Maaaaan, you and them villanelles really know how to get it on!
replying on It's about truckin' by INTRANSIT 27 Aug 2003, 3:28 PM
Why don't you write more? It's great therapy...if nothing else.
replying on What you know by INTRANSIT 27 Aug 2003, 3:19 PM
damn you horus. You're too good. I hadn't even realized how much of myself I had put into this. holy fuck! thanks bro.

So, was it a Monster Mash? Or mashed potatoes.
on Portsmouth belle 4 by Garrett S Sexton 26 Aug 2003, 3:07 PM
sweet. sad. dirty. opportunist.
replying on What you know by INTRANSIT 26 Aug 2003, 3:01 PM
I need help with the "face to face" line. any ideas?
replying on What you know by INTRANSIT 26 Aug 2003, 3:00 PM
yep. thanks, the eye turreting is better. obviously you're into reptile husbandry? I miss my 'guana.
on Laundry Day by impert&ent 26 Aug 2003, 6:34 AM
Change the opener. I think the rest is great.
I'd much rather be there than runnin' this east coast shit! Rock the house, dude!
I'd love to hear n.i.w.s. ! fuck.
on The Better of the Sea by abecedarian 25 Aug 2003, 5:20 PM
I hate people who write sailing verse better than I. Grrr. I pray... I pray..... something nasty and including a great white whale. I think I've just poxed myself.lol
You have quelled my grumpiness for the day. Thank you.
replying on What you know by INTRANSIT 23 Aug 2003, 7:45 AM
Thanks. I know there's a lot right, and a lot wrong, here. I'm on the road and gotta keep moving. I'll tweak it for adjustment at a later time.
on quarter-step (abridged) by richa 23 Aug 2003, 7:42 AM
This edges something of a marriage, to me. I would say: Just (ours).
on quarter-step (abridged) by richa 23 Aug 2003, 7:42 AM
This edges something of a marriage, to me. I would say: Just (ours).
on August and everyt'ing after by w~* ATHENA *~w 19 Aug 2003, 6:17 AM
Also, if your appetite is insatiable, why not write more?