on Apocalypse has come to end by Prince of Void
25 Dec 2005, 1:39 PM
"Screams of mans in end of their times" says it all.
on The Ship by Tainted Butterfly
11 Sep 2005, 11:41 AM
Lose the fourth stanza and it would rock. By the third everyone reading this know it's about you. You pull it off at the end by making it about Everywoman/child. -7- for now.
on a love not meant to be by nentwined
28 Jul 2005, 7:22 PM
We all have a crack in our base but we keep on trying. As another poet on this site said earlier, "Why have the choice if we never choose?" Keep sticking your hand into the clay, Netwined. You'll get there someday.
on Suicide by jessicazee
28 Jul 2005, 7:17 PM
Girl, you got poem bearing lips.
on The Worst Poem Ever Created (edited) by drnick
28 Jul 2005, 7:11 PM
If the poem had ended at the word orgasm it would be a ten. The :) and comment suck the joyous insanity out of this poem.-6- for getting it half right.
on A limerick by smiffy84
19 Jun 2005, 10:52 AM
When I heard this (let's see. I was twelve), It ended with the word "brother." Incest is always best in limerick form.
on word splatter by nentwined
19 Jun 2005, 10:43 AM
So many nights just like the one described make me resonate with this poem. Now I have to shower with my flat screen monitor. A bit of William Carlos Williams or Carlos William Carlos in this one.
on The And women by INTRANSIT
19 Jun 2005, 10:37 AM
Yeah, you're right. Those pumpkin shells don't keep them very well.
on White Stork by Blue Magpie
19 Jun 2005, 10:30 AM
Good form.
on Students by Blue Magpie
16 Jun 2005, 7:37 PM
I hear children's voices reading lines 12 through 14. I would hope that there are teachers in this country who might listen to their students as well as you seem to listen to yours. I admit that lines 7 through 11 are a bit off putting in that the images have already been overused in the daily media. But all in all, it seems to be an honest effort.
replying on The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi
16 Jun 2005, 5:21 PM
LA, Southern Cal. We have Summer that goes through January when it begins to rain and then Winter that pretends to find Spring in Apri but it's really only Summer with foggy mornings and hot afternoons.
on The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi
16 Jun 2005, 8:30 AM
We have no Autumn where I live. Thanks for the images.
on Auto-bio Poem by sacred_poet_me
16 Jun 2005, 8:28 AM
How are things at Michael Jackson's place these days?
on Don't be gay by wCUNTw
16 Jun 2005, 8:14 AM
If you feel up
Perry Como
Then you are a
Necro-homo.
Perry Como
Then you are a
Necro-homo.
Now her feelings of worth are numb." sad