poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Caducus (141-160)

Comments byCaducus, 141–160 back. Include replies

on A Barefoot Day in the Park by Dovina 29 Sep 2005, 9:05 AM
You always grab my attention 2nd stanza opening 4 is very good. The ending seems laclustre but then i am over dramatic.
on some deleted poem 29 Sep 2005, 9:07 AM
As the poetandknowit proclaimed ex pimple going straight poet i am sad to see no rhyme. The poems not bad though bar the opening line.
on some deleted poem 29 Sep 2005, 9:04 AM
very cool
on some deleted poem 6 Oct 2005, 1:32 AM
errrrm speechless
on some deleted poem 10 Oct 2005, 4:17 AM
For a moment there i thought of a dog.

Glad it was licorice.

Wham bam to the point nice one.
on some deleted poem 10 Oct 2005, 4:17 AM
actually was it a dog?
on Loss by <{Baba^Yaga}> 11 Oct 2005, 9:24 AM
still brings a tear to my eye
on some deleted poem 14 Oct 2005, 9:21 AM
More of a thought process that a final process of being poetic. Like the self assurance of last line
on some deleted poem 14 Oct 2005, 9:22 AM
Sounds like a song intro and a pretty good one but the end should be the end of an intro not the end
on The End by Caducus 13 Oct 2005, 9:35 AM
need to know last line of s4 - is it needed do you thibnk?
on some deleted poem 17 Oct 2005, 9:12 AM
Ancient

beautiful.
on some deleted poem 18 Oct 2005, 1:24 AM
Shannon is a woman in texas. Off the tangent poetry a bit.
on some deleted poem 18 Oct 2005, 5:53 AM
I cringed going back to read this.
on My deepest thoughts by poetandknowit 18 Oct 2005, 5:57 AM
Looking back on my earlier stuff I agree it sucked ass.

The occasional line / stanza was okay but I cringe looking back at some of it.

My error was to post stuff in no apparent order, for instance I would post a poem i wrote at 20 and then the same day one I just wrote at 27 and its no wonder you thought 'what the fuck'?

I realized this error and birthed the swine - now I hope some of my later ones (the last 30 or so) are passable.

I was an arrogant cunt and apologize.
on The nymph steals the farm-son by <~> 20 Oct 2005, 9:23 AM
I want lines 5 and 8 - lathe wonderful use of it too.
on some deleted poem 20 Oct 2005, 4:08 AM
An experiment of grief and alcohol.
on Marriage by Dovina 21 Oct 2005, 5:10 AM
I like the thoughts in this poem they are well written and orchestrated and though a mere opinion of one a damn eloquent one at that.

This in my humble opinion is one of your strongest - its very good.

Its also a good piece to do open mic.
on Ruins by Caducus 24 Oct 2005, 3:26 AM
I dont know about htis one it was written a year ago, you lot decide.
on some deleted poem 31 Oct 2005, 9:34 AM
announcing the time at the end refers to the time of her death was also the time of her life - 1941.

I just thought I'd mention it but its monday who cares lol./
on some deleted poem 29 Oct 2005, 3:09 AM
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